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1. the writing is a bit bad 2. you explain all the training too fast doing time jumps too fast 3. DON'T DO TOO MANY TIME JUMPS IN THE FIRST CHAPTERS 4. try to get your character to have a balance of power .... it's good that be strong but if it is too strong you make the story lose its meaning 5. the Babylon gate weakens it a bit is too strong a skill
Worst power progression Iβve ever seen, mc becomes a captain by the age of 15 WITHOUT his grimoire and then after 7 years is still the same strength, the other captains and his own students are as strong as him. Makes a captain kneel by only using mana but can barely defeat any of them in a battle. Some random spy is stronger than him in a lot of instances even though she uses sound magic against his space magic, which is like mud magic against Julius Novachronos time magic, completely impossible to win. Grammar is terrible, readable but mistakes literally every sentence, not to mention the author adds the most random things in sentences out of nowhere. The only good thing about this book is the steady chapters coming out, itβs not surprising to me that his other book only has a 3.8 rating. How this has a 4.8 rating baffles me.
I like how the story progressed a little bit slowly, and the construction of the characters and the kingdom is very good, the more he gets very stuck doing missions in Spade, the more I know it is temporary, I just hope that the character doesnβt become an emperor magician at the age of 15 because it would be kind of boring, he could have a Time Skip with him older and his pupils, he could have a kind of Satoro Gojo vision. Good Job
Not good, character gets super strong really quickly and makes up bull**** skills that shouldnβt work. He also just stops getting strong at the level of captain which is cap since he was able to get to that level really quick. The writing is also kinda meh for me, it just feels wrong in this book.