webnovel
amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv44yr
2020-08-08 22:45

[ Bias ] The reason I gave u 5 stars is cause.. 1) u have MC in diamond kingdom,,,dude, nice..no one did this...u can do so much ****,,,plus ur plan to be this kingdoms king,,,nice,,,its nice u didnt do the generic **** of following the main cast, being in clover kingdom or some**** like that. 2) The powers, love it....u have used some OP and fan favorite ****. suggestion: -the diamond kingdom is dark, dont ignore its darkness and dont look at the world like an anime,,,look at it realistically...no need for dark angsty **** but dont ignore that is my point...don do the generic happy friend ****. -Make MC smart and intelligent and plan ****..dont rush...and dont make him a show off retard [its nice how u hid power..do it]..also show moments of planning and intelligence. -continue what u did. ie: using other anime knowledge for attacks and ****..do continue -any relationships, just build,,no rush...any love interests,,,build, and dont make em useless ..make em helpful and loyal to MC powers: -Use magic to enhance body and create **** like 8 gates from naruto mixed with teleportation. -Bleach: Bakudo 81: Danku [ creates a spatial void shield- i think..pretty OP defense] -in BNHA the movie, the villian NINE had a quirk called hydra..u could do same ****, but infuse the dragons with spatial magic? -Space magic is related to gravity..so fujitoras ****, the push and pull **** from naruto, telekinesis Also this ****.. Amalgamation: Merging matter with another by overlapping the two objects' spaces, removing their separate boundaries. Pocket Dimension Creation: Create an extra dimension of space that exists outside of the original space. Singularity Inducement: By collapsing space into a single point. Spatial Aura: Create an aura of space around oneself. Spatial Crush: Crush objects by manipulating the surrounding or personal space by: Spatial Distortion: Bending the curvature of the three-dimensional space to distort anything within. Spatial Empowerment: Draw and gain strength from space itself. Spatial Mimicry: Become space itself without physical form. Spatial Perception: perceives spatial distances. Spatial Rift: Tear open the third dimension space to create portals for inter-dimensional attacks and travel. Spatial Slicing: User attacks by tearing out a section of space to sever the spatial connection of the target. Spatial Tuning: Distort and warp space in a specific area for various effects, even potentially alter reality. Spatiokinetic Combat Combine space with physical combat. Warp Bubble: User creates a small warp around themselves which is only marginally connected to the rest of the space around it. **: as always no moms or wives as love interests

Diamond Kingdoms Space Mage ( Completed )

Asce
4.6
88 Chs

Liked by 54 people

LIKE
Replies12
Asce
AsceAuthor

Thanks for the skills. I was kinda running on empty for skills so this is a huge help.

4yr
28
amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv4

pls.dont go generic or make a happy friendly perverted retarded MC

Asce:Thanks for the skills. I was kinda running on empty for skills so this is a huge help.
4yr
11
Asce
AsceAuthor

The other suggestions were also helpful. Thank you for your support.

4yr
8
amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv4

**: ur Mo fan FF...that had some**** wrong with it,,,dont do what u did there here...the reviews explain what went wrong there...maybe take those into consideration?

Asce:Thanks for the skills. I was kinda running on empty for skills so this is a huge help.
4yr
1
DarthVegito
DarthVegitoLv10

Just the diamond kingdom itself will make me want to read it.... thanks for the heads up

4yr
4
Yui_Kitsuki
Yui_KitsukiLv3

pls not a harem

Asce:The other suggestions were also helpful. Thank you for your support.
4yr
2
JunRaya
JunRayaLv4

No Harem unless its small and they are actually important

Asce:Thanks for the skills. I was kinda running on empty for skills so this is a huge help.
4yr
1
darkergrim
darkergrimLv5

holy Shit Man THIS IS SUM GOOD SHIT YOU COMMENTED

4yr
8
Pumpkin_pie
Pumpkin_pieLv3

4yr
4
Jackson_Alucard611
Jackson_Alucard611Lv14

you can also give him a bit of magnetokinesis (magnetic field manipulation) In the future since it's technically related to gravity but not by much. if I sound stupid pls let me know because I wrote this at 1:16 a.m.

Asce:The other suggestions were also helpful. Thank you for your support.
3yr
1
18484746
18484746Lv4

I just hope he gets a girlfriend maybe an oc

3yr
18484746
18484746Lv4

Yeah i say uts good 2 girls but they have to be strong and loyal only to the mc yunno

JunRaya:No Harem unless its small and they are actually important
3yr
Other Reviews
DaoistNineCircles
DaoistNineCirclesLv1

Protagonist wants to become a "king" but his own subordinates insult him on a daily basis. He gets yelled at, ordered around, and treated like a joke by his own subordinates. Nobody like this would become a king. His passive personality lacks the charisma of a ruler.

4yr

Pointles
PointlesLv4

I thought it will be shit but when I read it it was amazing you should read it 100% bbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbb

4yr
ILOVECARROTS
ILOVECARROTSLv1

I Need More! I Need More! I Need More! I Need More! I Need More! I Need More! I Need More! I Need More! I Need More! I Need More! I Need More! I Need More! .....................................................................

4yr
_nothing_much
_nothing_muchLv1

Hard to read. Even harder to understand how it has such good reviews. It lacks any sort of character planning and sense of development. Everything is just given to the mc, and even then the powers don't make sense.

3yr
Yuri_yuri
Yuri_yuriLv4

1. the writing is a bit bad 2. you explain all the training too fast doing time jumps too fast 3. DON'T DO TOO MANY TIME JUMPS IN THE FIRST CHAPTERS 4. try to get your character to have a balance of power .... it's good that be strong but if it is too strong you make the story lose its meaning 5. the Babylon gate weakens it a bit is too strong a skill

3yr
Drgoodreader
DrgoodreaderLv5

This story is bad. This story is bad This story is bad This story is bad This story is bad This story is bad. This story is bad This story is bad This story is bad This story is bad

4yr
LazyG0d
LazyG0dLv3

i would appreciate if u dont add harem....just saying. ____________________________________________________________________________________

4yr
Asce
AsceAuthor

Reviewing myself _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

4yr
Axenzzx
AxenzzxLv14

Worst power progression I’ve ever seen, mc becomes a captain by the age of 15 WITHOUT his grimoire and then after 7 years is still the same strength, the other captains and his own students are as strong as him. Makes a captain kneel by only using mana but can barely defeat any of them in a battle. Some random spy is stronger than him in a lot of instances even though she uses sound magic against his space magic, which is like mud magic against Julius Novachronos time magic, completely impossible to win. Grammar is terrible, readable but mistakes literally every sentence, not to mention the author adds the most random things in sentences out of nowhere. The only good thing about this book is the steady chapters coming out, it’s not surprising to me that his other book only has a 3.8 rating. How this has a 4.8 rating baffles me.

3yr
Related Stories

MHA: Absolute Telekinesis

A young boy dies a tragic death and is granted 3 wishes. He chooses to be reborn in MHA with the Telekinesis as his quirk and the potential to achieve Absolute Mastery and Power over his ability. The MC will be overpowered and there will be some dark elements. The novel will be quite realistic in the context of the MHA world. The MC will be cruel to his enemies and kind to those he cares about. There will be romance and potential for a harem of about 3, but not more than 5. I plan to continue with this hopefully until the end of MHA canon. I aim to upload chapters of about 2k words, and I hope people enjoy this fanfic. I'm open to any suggestions and criticism on how I could improve, but please no hate for no reason. The first few chapters are quite dark, but it gets better after that, so please stick around till then. MHA and any of the characters in it do not belong to me. I will try to release a bonus chapter every 500, 1k, 2k powerstones. Although, it depends on if I have chapters ready.

AMV_Weakly · Anime & Comics
4.2
34 Chs

Creating Manga Of One Piece In Pirates World Become My Ultimate Goal!

Rob was a high-level hacker and wanted by many government organizations because he leaked the secrets of many countries. So he didn't dare to come out of his hiding much. Since he was alone, he lived a difficult life, which that he found the joy and the excitement of life in only two things: The rule of the Internet, and the anime world. One day he came across an interesting advertisement on his personal computer that turned his life upside down. [Ding!] [The art publishing system is being prepared...] [The system is ready!] From that time onwards his goal became to draw One Piece manga in the pirates' world! And make the great era of pirates even more chaotic! ¶¶¶¶¶ Author: BlackStar_BH (Me) ¶¶¶¶¶ Note: Needless to say, this book has the same idea as "Creating The Manga Of Naruto On Naruto World Become My Ultimate Goal!" But here it applies to the world of One Piece, I was inspired by the idea and I wanted to apply it to the world of One Piece, and I hope it succeeds, of course, there will be a conspiracy and I will make sure to improve the story according to the readers opinions. ¶¶¶¶¶ As for publishing chapters, it would depend entirely on the interaction the story receives, whether it is 4 chapters a day or 2 chapters or 1 chapter or 0 chapters... It all depends on the readers' enthusiasm for this interesting book. ¶¶¶¶¶ I don't own One Piece nor do I own its characters, all I own is the protagonist, after all, this is just a fanfic without any profit, just for fun. I don't own Bleach, Attack on titan, Hunter X Hunter, Naruto, and I don't own their characters. ¶¶¶¶¶ EXTRA TAGS: #ATTACKONTITAN #HUNTERXHUNTER ¶¶¶¶¶ My Patreon: https://www.patreon.com/BlackStar_BH (+30 Chapters ahead Webnovel.) My Ko-fi: (New) https://ko-fi.com/blackstar_bh (+30 Chapters ahead Webnovel.)

BlackStar_BH · Anime & Comics
4.7
881 Chs

Fate: I Heard After Death, You Can Ascend to the Throne of Heroes?

Promise transmigrated to the TYPE-MOON world and became one of the students of Waver Velvet at the Clock Tower. But a dream must eventually come to an end. Upon waking from a night's sleep, he recalled his identity as a transmigrator and also discovered his golden finger. A Heroic Spirit Class Card. It can take Promise to different eras, and by leaving behind corresponding legends, he can ultimately ascend to the Throne of Heroes! He thus travelled to ancient Greek mythology and Norse mythology. Promise: "I heard after death, you can ascend to the Throne of Heroes. What are you waiting for, come on, kill me!" (PS: This book is not a traditional simulator story; its content mainly revolves around the Age of Gods, hence the Age of Gods is a long narrative! I didn't use TYPE-MOON in the title as it was already too large) __________ Yup, this is a translation, coz why not? The credit goes to the original author, "It's Just Fate /Fate is just a book." Chinese name: 缘分而已 著 / 游戏竞技 And so, if the original author is reading this and wants me to remove it, then please leave a review below. Link: https://trxs.cc/tongren/8889.html Original: https://www.hbooker.com/chapter-list/100389372?arr_reverse=1 https://wap.ciweimao.com/book/100389372 ......... For advance chapters join my Patreon .. patreon.com/abhi28

Abhii_28 · Anime & Comics
4.7
299 Chs

Surprise! I've Transmigrated Again

I've transmigrated, and I've arrived in the KonoSuba world. MC: Whoa there, hang on a sec! Don't say anything yet, let me first trick this stupid goddess into giving me more abilities! Some time later (and some psychological abuse)… Aqua: Okay, you win! Pick your skills! And fast! MC: Alright, check this out! I'm snagging〚World Traveling〛and〚Analyze and Copy〛! Sweet deal, right? Hahaha, I'm gonna be unstoppable! ◈◈◈ This novel is a multi-anime crossover, including but not limited to: 《 KonoSuba 》《 Demon Slayer 》《 Danmachi 》《 Re:Zero 》《 Overlord 》and more! Raw: 没想到吧我又又又穿越了 or Surprise! I've Transmigrated Again Author: 狐狐狐狐狐涂 or Fox Fox Fox Fox Fox Paint Disclaimer: This is just a translation, with no intention to offend the original authors of the works nor the fanfic author. https://www.patreon.com/c/mrblackwing

MrBlackWing · Anime & Comics
4.2
194 Chs

Dimensional Chat Group: Speed-o'-Light

Transmigrating as Kizaru, living in the world of One Piece for decades, he eventually rose to the rank of Admiral, his strength near invincible Living with the philosophy of "I've been chasing pirates my whole life, can't I just enjoy myself for a bit?" Kizaru slacked off at work, skimped on missions, and bedded many girls Just as Kizaru thought his life would continue peacefully like this, a dimensional chat group suddenly invited him to join! Good news was, Kizaru seems to know all the members of the group Another was; there was no group leader or admins—everyone in the group is truly equal "Hmm, maybe it's time to rise again." ===== All rights goes to their owners. I literally don't own anything here. Cover picture's from Pinterest, message me if you want it taken down, thanks.

Moziel · Anime & Comics
4.3
99 Chs
Login