Wild_Bunni93
The details of this story is amazing. The author created a very beautiful world right from the start. Each characters were also described really well, as a reader you can see how meticulous everything was written. Each chapter is long, so for all of you fantasy readers out there, this is such a good treat! There was one scene that I am not comfortable with, so I chose to skip it. But overall, it was still an enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing this world with me!
This is a really great book, it keeps you on your toes I will keep reading to find out what lies ahead fir erza, I love fantasy books so this is a plus it’s interesting how everything is set up..to how the characters personalities and traits clash against each other. The author really did her best with this is an awesome book
C'mon girl, keep going, you've got us curious for what's next! I really liked how you built the world, and how you make it simple, nice and accessible to read. Perhaps a re editing can organize and make things perfect. What matters most is the story, and it's good material. Your style is light, even if not everything in the story is. Will keep following your novel.
Heads up: I don't really sugarcoat a lot of things with edits. I think that the world you paint is an interesting one. From the first chapter, you paint a vivid description of the land that helps bring the reader into the story that you have created. However, I would definitely recommend breaking up some of the larger paragraphs because it does seem to be somewhat of an info dump instead of weaving everything subtly into the storyline. My final note was that I was not at all prepared for this story to be mature??? Like I personally do not read uhh those scenes, so I was very taken aback when it came up. So just for a suggestion: maybe have a warning at the top of the chapter or list your novel as mature?
The world in this story seems very interesting. The story background was described very clearly and I enjoy fantasy books a lot. Ezra's character design sounds great. There are some grammar mistakes and punctuation. Remember to put the space after the comma and the periods, not before. Other than that, it's good.
Regardless a few errors the narration is readable. As far I've read I want to state a few notable things, on the top comes the plotline which is really interesting and comes up to a fantasy tale well. Moving onto the world building it would have been better if it was created with the fusion of dialogues or some incidental impacts rather than narrating it simply. The MCs is portrayed very well, an innocent and a little naive as I got her. So far a good work and a few readers prefer long chapters, the rest skips the paragraphs which results in omitting the useful information. In a nut shell it's worth checking stuff. ❤ Keep updating.