Reviews of A Walk Through The Eternity

Hello there. Your story is pretty interesting I'll give you that. However, there are some things that you should be mindful of. 1- The first chapter was a difficult read for me, because there were little to not punctuation, so everything seemed like one never-ending sentence. So just brush that up. Apart from the above, writing quality is good, although there are moments were tenses were an issue but that's the least. I make mistakes too with tenses so you're not the only one. Story development was great. To me, everything progressed smoothly and didn't leave me confused. Character design is great as well. I like how the MC isn't a typical hero, nor is he a mainstream villain. Good job. This is a really interesting story you got here. Continue writing.

Hi there. UnliMegane here, dropping by for a quick review. Well, most of the things I wanted to point out have already been discussed by the other reviewers, so I won't expound on them much anymore. I will, however, try to give my two cents in the grammar department. But I'll try not to sound too harsh. I hope. Ahem. Anyway, I won't fault you for this much because it's a challenge us non-native English speakers face very often. Just a few quick pointers then: *Look out for Homonyms - You know Homonyms. Those words which sound so alike but mean two very different things. In the latest chapter, I've already spotted two as early as the first few paragraphs (i.e. there/their and faiths/fates). *Know your Tenses - It's a pit I often fall into, myself. It's a bit of a chore, but it certainly pays to brush up on your present/past/future tenses and all their variations. *Sentence Flow - Sometimes, more isn't necessarily better. Try to see if it's possible to cut one long sentence into separate parts which are more manageable in size, but still convey the intended ideas clearly. *Punctuation Marks - Another thing I'm also having trouble with. Them pesky comas and hyphens are a pain, but knowing when and where to place them will help with the flow and coherence of your sentences immensely. That's about it. I like the overall concept of your story. Reading about a villain's rise to villainy can be a very trippy read, and can attract a specific type of audience. The litrpg elements are a nice touch too. Just a bit confusing with all the flash forwards and backwards and whatnot. I hope you'll continue to work hard and improve your writing. You're doing nicely though. More power. Peace out ;)

Dear Author, I liked the story. It's good and pretty interesting. Though I am not a person who like to read sci-fi novels I liked yours. The story has the potential and your writings skills are good. Great works Author!! Keep it up. My best regards to you😄

The synopsis was really interesting and a really nice hook! The writing is amazing, there are barely any mistakes except there is a few minor run-on sentences, but that's about it! The story idea and concept seems super interesting, I like the structure of [ ] and such for the machines, overall, author-san did a really good job!

The story is great, the author have an interesting idea, the villains among the villains, the guide for the villain not for a hero. Although I have the same problem as you for grammar in works, I know we can do it. So good luck hope we got better :"*

While it's still too early to say, the story is pretty interesting. The bionic chip makes more sense than a random system appearing out of nowhere. Furthermore, while there are several reincarnation cliches, it's still in the realm of unique. I like it so far. A couple of grammar errors here and there, so I recommend checking and re-reading if you have time. But, not so much that it distracts me from the story. Do your best author! Fight on! >3</

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The story starts off a little slow, but then the progress is good. Although it's a little confusing at first, but after reading it twice I was able to understand it. The overall plot is good and I am sure the story has amazing potential. The character development is also well described, while the updates are not stable. No need to rush. Overall, the writing is pretty good 👍

The story is high action pack drama in futuristic world! It moves ahead with great speed! The only thing I would say is that the sentences are too long. For example there are some paragraphs where there's no full-stop or a comma. Although it is entirely on the author to create the story, it is better to write shorter sentences. Overall, nice work!

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It is a great book for sci-fi lovers! It might be a little confusing at first but as I continued reading I began enjoying it, this is my first sci-fi book that I am reading and I am absolutely enjoying it. Continue keeping up the good work!

Great story! As a lover of sci-fi novels, I really enjoy this novel. Your writing skills are great. However, you may want to invest in an editor as I noticed some grammar mistakes in your chapters. But overall it is a really enthralling book and I love the whole concept. Keep it up, author!

This story has great potential and it definitely stands out to me, since I haven't read many stories that focus on inherited villainy. Although I can still understand the writing, despite the many basic grammar errors (which I totally understand if English isn't your first language), there are also a lot of repeated phrases or wrong words than can easily be fixed with just editing your own work. Good effort!

this story has a great potential for having the protagonist of evil, a technological world .... now only wait for the results of the author🤔🤔🤔

Yes I gave my story full stars that's because it's my first time publishing so please go easy on the comments and ratting. Thanks for reading 😁