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Chapter VIII
Zhang Lingling, A Guest at Home (Part 2)
He Yongrou leisurely strolled along the streets with Zhang Lingling. When the two of them reached the entrance of a flower shop, Zhang Lingling suddenly stopped in her tracks.
"Sister Rourou, what flower is this? It's so beautiful!" Zhang Lingling pointed at the lilies in the flower shop and asked He Yongrou curiously.
"Lingling, these are lilies." When He Yongrou mentioned lilies, she thought of Bai Chunfang, and a faint blush appeared on her face.
Sister Rourou, I want lilies." Zhang Lingling looked at He Yongrou and begged.
"Lingling, be good. I'll go buy it for you now." He Yongrou smiled and stroked her head.
He Yongrou entered the flower shop and bought a bouquet of lilies. She took one out of the bouquet and gave it to Zhang Lingling.
"Thank you, Sister Rourou." Zhang Lingling smiled happily.
He Yongrou continued shopping with Zhang Lingling. The two of them only returned home at night.
"Yongrou, Zhang Lingling, you're back. Dinner is ready. Come and eat." Seeing the two of them come back, Bai Chunfang, who was wearing an apron, walked to the door and said to them,
he said. The table was filled with sumptuous dishes. Zhang Lingling ran to the dining table and sat on the chair to eat.
"Chunfang." Bai Chunfang turned around and walked towards the dining table. He Yongrou suddenly grabbed her hand.
"Yong Rou, what's the matter?" Bai Chunfang turned around and asked.
"This bouquet of lilies is for you." He Yongrou knelt on one knee and handed the bouquet to Bai Chunfang.
"Thank you for being brave and gentle." Bai Chunfang's face revealed a happy smile.
After the three of them finished eating, He Yongrou and Zhang Lingling sat on the sofa to rest. Bai Chunfang walked to the balcony and looked up at the full moon in the sky.
"Wow! Such a beautiful moon, such a bright moon." Bai Chunfang sighed.
"Wow, sister, you look so beautiful like this." When He Yongrou wasn't paying attention, Zhang Lingling covered her head with a translucent white gauze.
"Yong Rou, the moonlight is so bright tonight. You're so beautiful. Come and take a photo." Bai Chunfang turned her head and said to He Yongrou in the living room.
"En, alright." He Yongrou walked into her bedroom and took the camera to the living room outside the balcony. She placed her on the tripod and took the time to take the photo.
After setting it to 20 seconds later, she walked to the balcony with the bouquet of lilies in her hands and stood with Bai Chunfang.
The pure white and gentle moonlight cast a beautiful layer of white silver gauze on their bodies.
"Ah--" Just three seconds before the photo was taken, Bai Chunfang's face suddenly revealed a mischievous smile. She grabbed He Yongrou's waist and held her horizontally.
Bai Chunfang looked down at the panic-stricken He Yongrou, and a bright smile appeared on her face.
There was a crack. A white light flashed, and the camera captured the warm and romantic scene.
"Lingling, who are you going to sleep with tonight?" He Yongrou looked at Zhang Lingling with a friendly smile.
"Sister Fangfang, Sister Rourou, I want to sleep with the two of you." Zhang Lingling replied.
Bai Chunfang and Yong Rou looked at each other and smiled happily at Zhang Lingling.
The three of them walked into Bai Chunfang's bedroom and slept on the bed. Zhang Lingling slept in the middle, while Bai Chunfang and He Yongrou slept on both sides. Soon, the three of them fell asleep.

Answer 1

There is still a lot of room for improvement in the novel, but you can refer to the following suggestions for improvement:

1. Decide on the theme and plot of the story. A good novel should have a clear theme and plot that the reader can understand and resonate with.

2. Create an attractive character image. A good novel should have a vivid and three-dimensional character image that the reader could like and appreciate.

3. Grasp the rhythm of narration. A good novel should have a good narrative rhythm so that the reader can follow the development of the story and understand it.

4. Use appropriate language. A good novel should use appropriate language and style so that the reader can feel the emotions and atmosphere of the story.

5. Master the narrative perspective. A good novel should use an appropriate narrative point of view so that readers can better understand the plot and characters.