Everyone, please help me take a look at this opening and give me some suggestions. This is my first time writing a novel.

2024-09-11 06:02

Reverse Bone wedge The gray clouds rolled like a violent dragon. Ye Li stood on the empty streets of London and felt an inexplicable sense of fear and loneliness. This was a loneliness that did not belong to him, as if it came from ancient times, but he received it like a signal receiving tower. He took a deep breath of the light blue smoke and slowly exhaled after circulating it in his lungs. Ye Li sighed lightly. So he would be lonely too. Ye Li took out a 10-Euros note from the pocket of his windbreaker and respectfully put it in the ordinary British hat on the ground with the expression and posture of a devout Muslim worshipping the Holy City of Mecca. Then, he stood up and glanced at a shadow at the corner of the street. "Francis Bacon. Stop hiding, you know my ability." Ye Li said in a tone that was almost sorrowful," However, can we change to another place? I don't want to ruin this song." "Alright, I like this 'Nocturne' as well." His deep voice was like a death knell." Because of my wife." " Then…let's go get some coffee. After all, we're not enemies." Ye Li tightened his windbreaker, and his face returned to its usual elegance." Why don't we go to Moulin Rouge?" "Let's go see…" Before Francis Bacon could finish, Ye Li jumped up exaggeratedly. He quickly took a few steps back and asked carefully," Old man?" "Yes." The simple and powerful answer was like a curse that struck Ye Li's brain, making him unable to wrap his head around it. "Are you sure you're looking for me?" Ye Li's pitiful appearance really made people suspect that he was really that famous assassin,"Qing Ye". "Yes." It was another simple answer. "I won't go, unless I die." Ye Li suddenly became tough, a murderous intent appearing between his brows." Tell him to get ready. I will go and retrieve what belongs to me." "Young man, don't be so angry. It's bad for your health." A faint voice sounded beside Ye Li's ear, giving him a fright." You won't be able to get it up." He saw that the old wandering artist who was playing the violin and acting like he had lost himself was already behind Ye Li. He was looking at Ye Li as if he was watching a monkey show. "Hey, hey, hey, who are you? What does this have to do with you? Let's go, let's go." Ye Li waved his hand impatiently. He was really not in a good mood, and there was already a warning sign on his face that said," Don't approach strangers." However, the old man didn't buy it. His expression didn't change at all. His dry hands made an extremely wretched gesture and he laughed strangely." This will affect the relationship between husband and wife." Completely ignoring Ye Li's anger, he even used his hand to play with it. Ye Li calmed down just like that. " Are you from the North Sea, sir?" he asked in an almost obscure language with his eyes half-closed." But I really don't remember Odin training someone like you?" "Looks like I'm really old. The world doesn't remember me." " Oh?" Ol 'Amos sighed and continued to ask with an extremely wretched expression." Do you want to know how to conquer a woman? Do you want to know the secret of Odin?" Then, he winked at Ye Li with his mouse-like eyes, hinting him to listen to his nonsense. Ye Li ignored him and kicked him away. He pointed at the wretched old man on the ground and sneered." Don't think that I don't know who you are. You're the old Mister Loqiluo who's known as the God of Deception. What? You want to cheat me of that thing?" Forget it. Times have changed. You should play your violin well,'great' artist…" " Haha!" Luo Qi laughed dryly." Am I not worth this price?" The violin in his hand tightened and turned into an MP5 assault rifle." Go to hell!" Francis? " Young Master!" Peigan was shocked and shouted," Young Master, be careful!" Ye Li waved his hand nonchalantly. He stretched out his hand, and the MP5 turned into scrap metal. He looked at the pig liver colored Luo Qi and sneered." It seems that some people have forgotten my ability, huh?" Loki stared blankly at the corroded MP5. After a while, he let out a loud cry and let go of the gun. However, it seemed to be too late. His white hair had already withered and solidified. Ye Li looked at Francis, who was still standing by the street in a daze. Peigan tightened his windbreaker." Go back. Tell the old man that I'll be back when the time comes. Just don't bother me for the time being." He left. Also, those who are watching the show can also disperse. Don't make things difficult for me." Turning around, the wind blew, and the ground was white.

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2024-09-11 08:07

When you hear this word, your target has already appeared. He was wearing a warm robe to face you. His eyes were filled with endless worry and unease. He didn't miss this beginning, but he needed to go further. You could see in his eyes that there was something else added to his worry and uneasiness. For example, you could see from his eyes that his soul was expanding or that he felt a powerful shadow approaching him. In the second half of this opening, you can describe your target in more depth and further describe his emotional changes. For example, you can turn his sorrow into anxiety or his shadow into fanaticism. This way, you can learn more emotional elements from your target character and improve the sense of immersion in your novel. In general, you can continue to develop this opening, but you need to make your words and descriptions more in-depth and improve your sense of immersion. If you need any more suggestions, please let me know.

Everyone, take a look at my novel and give me some advice on writing a novel

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2024-09-19 02:19

There is still a lot of room for improvement in the novel, but you can refer to the following suggestions for improvement: 1. Decide on the theme and plot of the story. A good novel should have a clear theme and plot that the reader can understand and resonate with. 2. Create an attractive character image. A good novel should have a vivid and three-dimensional character image that the reader could like and appreciate. 3. Grasp the rhythm of narration. A good novel should have a good narrative rhythm so that the reader can follow the development of the story and understand it. 4. Use appropriate language. A good novel should use appropriate language and style so that the reader can feel the emotions and atmosphere of the story. 5. Master the narrative perspective. A good novel should use an appropriate narrative point of view so that readers can better understand the plot and characters.

Everyone, please help me take a look at the "Lily" that I wrote and give me your opinions.

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2024-09-25 18:13

An example of his feelings after reading Lily is as follows: " Lily " was a novel that described the growth of young girls, family and love. The plot was compact, the characters were vivid, and the language was beautiful. I was deeply interested in this book and spent a lot of time reading it. In this book, I felt the author's deep insight into human nature and his cherishment of life. The author reveals the complexity of human nature by describing the protagonist's growth and makes people realize that everyone has their own unique character and destiny. In addition, the author also described the power of kinship and love to make readers feel the importance of kinship and love and educate readers to cherish these precious emotions. In the end, the author also painted a beautiful picture of life through beautiful language to let the readers feel the beauty of life. I think this book is a good novel worth reading. It has taught me many truths about life and made me cherish life and family more.

Can everyone please help me take a look at the beginning of this novel?

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2024-09-24 05:07

The beginning of a web novel was very important. It could attract the attention of the readers and make them want to continue reading. A good beginning could make the novel more attractive and increase the reader's interest. There were some noteworthy points at the beginning of the novel. The beginning should be concise and clear, not too long or too complicated, so that the reader can quickly understand the background and story content of the novel. You can describe an unexpected event, an amazing scene, or an interesting plot to attract the reader's attention. The beginning should be able to arouse the curiosity of the readers and make them want to continue reading and explore more content. In general, the beginning of the novel was okay, but it still needed to be improved. If you want to improve the beginning, you can try to describe the background and plot more concisely and clearly, and attract the reader's attention through attractive scenes and plots.

This is a micro-novel. Please help me take a look ~

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2024-09-15 01:20

Micro-fiction was a short and creative form of text. It usually only had dozens to hundreds of words, but it could leave a deep impression on readers through unique storylines, character creation, and language use. The following is a micro-novel I wrote: "A Chance Encounter Late at Night." The streets were silent in the middle of the night. Only the occasional sound of cars and pedestrians could be heard. Zhang Ming (male, 25 years old) was walking alone on the way home, feeling a little frustrated. At this moment, he saw a girl sitting on a bench by the roadside. She was holding a book in her hand and looked very engrossed. Zhang Ming felt that this girl was a little mysterious, so he went forward and asked: "Hello, your posture is very cute. Do you like this book?" The girl looked up and saw the confusion in his eyes. She smiled and replied,"Yes, I like this book because it allows me to see many different stories." "Why are you reading here?" Zhang Ming asked in surprise. The girl looked up with a hint of sadness in her eyes."Actually, I often come here to read books and listen to music alone. It's very peaceful here." Zhang Ming suddenly felt a little touched and asked,"If you have time, can you come home with me?" I'll give you a book." The girl looked up and nodded with a smile. But I'm going to sleep now, so I can only stay here." Zhang Ming looked at the girl's back and felt touched. He gently picked up the book in the girl's hand and walked to the bench to sit down and start reading with her. Time passed quickly, and the two of them had already read a lot of books together. Zhang Ming found that this girl was not only smart, diligent, but also had a unique temperament. He began to get to know her and found that she was a very interesting person. In the end, Zhang Ming invited the girl to go home with him. They shared their interests and thoughts and spent a wonderful night together. The next day, Zhang Ming gave the girl his favorite novel and invited her to the exhibition. The girl gladly accepted the invitation and spent an unforgettable weekend admiring the artwork together. From that day on, Zhang Ming and the girl became good friends and they spent a lot of good times together.

I wrote the beginning of a novel. Everyone, help me take a look!

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2024-09-20 05:36

As night fell, the city was brightly lit. A bustling street ran through the entire city. In this bustling city, there was a mysterious corner where a mysterious organization was hidden. The members of this organization are all people with special abilities. They have extraordinary wisdom and courage. In order to pursue the secrets in their hearts, they chose to join this organization. In this organization, they continued to learn, grow, and explore the mysteries of the world. Everything they experienced was to protect the world and uphold justice.

It's my first time writing a novel, help me!

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2024-09-03 08:44

There were a few points to note when writing a novel: 1. Decide on the theme and plot of the story and come up with the basic framework of the story. 2. Create characters so that readers can really immerse themselves in the story and resonate with the characters. 3. Use language skills to create a unique story language to make the work more appealing. Pay attention to the structure and rhythm of the novel to make the story develop naturally and smoothly and bring pleasure to the readers. 5. Read more excellent novels to absorb inspiration and experience to continuously improve your writing level. I hope these suggestions will be helpful. I wish your novel will get better and better!

I'm writing a novel, and there's a question that stumps me. Please help me take a look.

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2024-09-15 16:24

There was a problem that was hard to avoid when writing a novel, and that was the character setting. Character setting is a very important part of a novel because it determines the plot and character of the novel. A perfect character setting needed to include the character's age, occupation, background, personality, goals, and motivation. You need to pay attention to the following points in character setting: Age of the character: The age of the character is very important because it determines the character and experience of the character. You need to choose an appropriate age to make the character's behavior and way of thinking more realistic. Character's Class: Character's Class is also a very important aspect because it determines the character's personality and action style. You can choose an appropriate class to make your character's behavior and way of thinking more realistic. 3. Character background: The background of the character is also very important because it determines the character and experience of the character. You need to choose an appropriate background to make the character's behavior and way of thinking more realistic. Character's personality: Character's personality is the most important part of character setting. You need to choose an appropriate character to make the character's behavior and way of thinking more in line with your wishes. Character goals and motives: The character's goals and motives are also very important because they determine the character's actions and decisions. You need to choose an appropriate target to make the character's actions and decisions more reasonable. In terms of character design, you need to consider these factors in order to make the character more perfect.

Please help me take a look. What font is this?

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2024-09-24 05:33

I'm not sure which font you're referring to. Please provide more context information such as the name of the font, what scene it appears in, the font style, etc. so that I can better help you.

It's my first time writing a novel, help me edit it

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2024-09-25 16:33

Of course, I'd be happy to help you edit the novel. Before you start, you can tell me the type and theme of the story you want to write, as well as the style and characteristics you want the novel to present. This way, I can better provide you with advice and guidance.

It's my first time writing a novel, help me edit it

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2024-09-16 17:40

Of course I can help you edit your novel! However, you need to let me understand the content and style of your novel first so that I can better provide you with suggestions and suggestions for improvement. Please let me know what kind of modifications and improvements you need. Let's start together!