Review Detail of DaoistJ2BfOl in Fantasy Realm - Harem - One Piece - Naruto - Harry Potter - HxH - SW

Good, You have some errors but it is your first fic and your effort is noticeable... keep going and do what you have to, it is good that you play with your imagination and through the worlds, use the ones you like the most, but if you start a long plot, what from the popular world, like Naruto, hxh, one piece, game of thrones