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Wachdog
WachdogLv42mth
2024-08-31 02:52

10 chapters so far, the MC arrived in another reality and everything happens in the most fluid way I can imagine, at first it seems like he's a double character but apparently he was quickly discarded for the good of the story, the story has as its protagonist the MC with memory loss who quickly recovers fragments chapter after chapter, and the first interactions, although forced perhaps, are nothing more than the plot that gave rise to all this, I don't know what else to say, the story is worth it.

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Stingleese
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Thank you man, appreciate the review, I hope you enjoy the rest of the story!!

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therealet
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Reviewed at 10 chapters. Writing Quality: 5 Stars. No grammatical errors that I noticed, sentences are very palatable for a reader, all-in-all stellar job. Stability of Updates: 5 Stars. At the time of reviewing the author uploaded multiple chapters in a day, I imagine they stockpiled, if not then that amount of quality that fast is worthy of even 6 Stars if I could give such a rating. Story Development: 4 Stars. It's very hard to grade this category when a story is in it's early chapters because any criticisms are kind of baseless when there isn't much material, so take this with a grain of salt. The speed of the pacing is good, but it's a bit too linear for my taste with how it jumps from each individual problem to the next, and on a grand scale the story just seems aimless. Minato will return to Konoha after he regains his memories so it calls into question what he would even do on Earth. Character Design: 4 Stars. Adapts everyone pretty well, but I wish for the X-Men not to feel like such pushovers. World Background: 3 Stars. Character perspectives are too boxed in and the linear pacing hinders the world's ability to stand on it's own and feel truly lived in and real. It feels far too much like a one-man show with how we barely get new perspectives and how the story throws problems at Minato one at a time. Could do with more interactions with extras, perspective shifts to relevant characters about stuff not only involving the M.C, perspective shifts to characters not actually relevant to the plot currently (i.e Avengers, S.H.I.E.L.D, yada yada), intertwining plotlines instead of the linear pacing we have. Just my own personal opinion though.

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