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N1gga
N1ggaLv35mth
2024-06-03 19:54

It's aight. Personally the story is going too fast. In three chapters he has escaped a gang, gotten adopted and met the entire family. Also the writing is mid. Writing in first Person works sometimes but this just isn't it. it's written in a weird mix of past tense and present tense. The plot is intreasting. I don't know how or why MC knows about Modren Family. It's probably because I skimmed it. Keep working author but try to make the ploy a little slower. You could have made him escaping the gang into multiple chapter. Yet you finished it in a couple hundred words. Besy of luck author and keep writing to improve :)

Modern Family: Genius

burakku
4.3
31 Chs

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burakku
burakkuAuthor

Thanks for the review. I will try to better the grammar. I originally wanted to make the escape two parts, but instead made one with 1800 words. The plot will slow down now. I made a big time-skip as I had no idea what to write about. Thanks for the advice.

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N1gga
N1ggaLv3

Np, your idea is good, you just need to execute it better. also one tip i can give is that once you have finished writing the chapter. copy or cut like 300-400 words of the story and ask GPT to fix grammar and spelling mistakes. this way you can fix any grammatical or spelling mistakes of your entire chapter.

burakku:Thanks for the review. I will try to better the grammar. I originally wanted to make the escape two parts, but instead made one with 1800 words. The plot will slow down now. I made a big time-skip as I had no idea what to write about. Thanks for the advice.
5mth
Tyler_Henline_7485
Tyler_Henline_7485Lv4

what does MC look like it was never mentioned

burakku:Thanks for the review. I will try to better the grammar. I originally wanted to make the escape two parts, but instead made one with 1800 words. The plot will slow down now. I made a big time-skip as I had no idea what to write about. Thanks for the advice.
4mth
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Melshan
MelshanLv7

Who is his love interest?

burakku:Thanks for the review. I will try to better the grammar. I originally wanted to make the escape two parts, but instead made one with 1800 words. The plot will slow down now. I made a big time-skip as I had no idea what to write about. Thanks for the advice.
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Gabichu_Yeah
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I have a question for anyone who wants to answer, what is attractive about Modern Family to make a fanfic? I mean, I read several MF fanfics but I don't find the fun in reading them, it's a normal world with a normal and even average plot in several cases, I would appreciate it if someone could explain to me why there are so many MF fanfics.

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