I had the interesting idea of an ordinary person reborn as the original Doppelganger. Made this story to get better at story telling if you have criticism be constructive about it..... if you leave a review with cussing in it i will delete it have a nice day
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I hope you don't mind me asking this, but is English not your main language?. I checked the synopsis as well as the self submitted review you left, but i don't think i saw you mention it. I only ask because of the way this chapter is arranged as a whole. I don't know if you've noticed and have tried to fix it. It's kinda hard to read this when there's two independent clauses running together without proper punctuation or appropriate conjunctions. Among other things. 1* is the original text, and 2* is the corrected one. 1* "Dear twin of mine, stop wearing that necklace, and you will be better at everything physical, you can do i promise you" 2* "Dear twin of mine, stop wearing that necklace, and you will be physically better at everything you can do, i promise you." 1*"Don't Niklaus, mother would be mad, and there is no magic, in that necklace, i don't feel anything." 2*"Don't Niklaus, mother would be mad, and there's no magic in that necklace, I don't feel anything," Finn said. This is just a small sample among others. I actually like the concept of this story and wish nothing but the best, not many TVD/OR fanfics on webnovel, and if there are, they don't last long.
Yes English is my first language. this is just my first time writing. I will eventually go back through and actually correct my punctuation. I only started writing 18 or 19 days ago. when I posted the first chapter on my other book. for now i just load the chapters through my computer then post it. As i get better at writing i will go through and correct all the mistakes. thank you though.
CrownClown666:I hope you don't mind me asking this, but is English not your main language?. I checked the synopsis as well as the self submitted review you left, but i don't think i saw you mention it. I only ask because of the way this chapter is arranged as a whole. I don't know if you've noticed and have tried to fix it. It's kinda hard to read this when there's two independent clauses running together without proper punctuation or appropriate conjunctions. Among other things. 1* is the original text, and 2* is the corrected one. 1* "Dear twin of mine, stop wearing that necklace, and you will be better at everything physical, you can do i promise you" 2* "Dear twin of mine, stop wearing that necklace, and you will be physically better at everything you can do, i promise you." 1*"Don't Niklaus, mother would be mad, and there is no magic, in that necklace, i don't feel anything." 2*"Don't Niklaus, mother would be mad, and there's no magic in that necklace, I don't feel anything," Finn said. This is just a small sample among others. I actually like the concept of this story and wish nothing but the best, not many TVD/OR fanfics on webnovel, and if there are, they don't last long.
I had a guess, based on your profile name, that you're an english speaker. It's all good, i noticed the number of chapters released as well as how long ago they've been up on webnovel. I just figured I'd let you know so that you'd be able to correct them at the earliest stages of the few releases being uploaded. That way, you don't have the hassle of having to go back when you're 30-50+ chapters in. I've seen some authors make that mistake and never correct them. The first chapters are important. First impressions are everything. People either drop because of the story or because of how it's being presented(meaning the writing). Sometimes both. I'm gonna wait to read this when it's got more chapters, i have a feeling I'm gonna be binge reading this. Until then...
Nerdy_stoner:Yes English is my first language. this is just my first time writing. I will eventually go back through and actually correct my punctuation. I only started writing 18 or 19 days ago. when I posted the first chapter on my other book. for now i just load the chapters through my computer then post it. As i get better at writing i will go through and correct all the mistakes. thank you though.
Is this a harem
It's a thousand years throughout the book, so yes there will be a few flings. But as of the latest chapters and story arc, there are only two true love interests. The MC won't have a 'Harem' like most other books, it will be two possibly Three true love interests throughout the book, which will go from the birth of the original vampires to the end of the originals. Hope that answers your question.
war_craft:Is this a harem
Thanks for replying
Nerdy_stoner:It's a thousand years throughout the book, so yes there will be a few flings. But as of the latest chapters and story arc, there are only two true love interests. The MC won't have a 'Harem' like most other books, it will be two possibly Three true love interests throughout the book, which will go from the birth of the original vampires to the end of the originals. Hope that answers your question.
that's awesome I'm kind of sad that you're not going to Legacies I was hoping you're going to include Vampire Diaries and the originals and Legacies in this book since no one seems to want to include all three books even though they're from the same universe
Nerdy_stoner:It's a thousand years throughout the book, so yes there will be a few flings. But as of the latest chapters and story arc, there are only two true love interests. The MC won't have a 'Harem' like most other books, it will be two possibly Three true love interests throughout the book, which will go from the birth of the original vampires to the end of the originals. Hope that answers your question.
that's awesome I am sad that you don't plan on adding Legacies since for some reason no one wants to add Vampire Diaries originals and Legacies into one book even though they're from the same universe
Nerdy_stoner:It's a thousand years throughout the book, so yes there will be a few flings. But as of the latest chapters and story arc, there are only two true love interests. The MC won't have a 'Harem' like most other books, it will be two possibly Three true love interests throughout the book, which will go from the birth of the original vampires to the end of the originals. Hope that answers your question.
Are the love interest OCs?
Nerdy_stoner:It's a thousand years throughout the book, so yes there will be a few flings. But as of the latest chapters and story arc, there are only two true love interests. The MC won't have a 'Harem' like most other books, it will be two possibly Three true love interests throughout the book, which will go from the birth of the original vampires to the end of the originals. Hope that answers your question.
