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Love me a good eastern novel. I like where the book is headed, it’s obvious you have a good idea about the future of your story. Nice writing too, good descriptions and dialogue. My only critique is that it’s very slow in the beginning, I wish you had begun with the pagoda opening instead of the awkward two year training/breakfast montage.

Cultivating Immortality With a Broken Pagoda

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Thank you for the review! That was just to establish the biggest cause of his early motivation. How much his family is doing for him, and how much he wants to pay them back.