Shameless Review On My Very First Fan Fiction.

Legitimately, I don't know how people enjoy reading this. Issue 1: The first problem with it is the fact that when it says PokeMMO, it means PokeMMO. All pokemon characters aren't real people and are just NPC's with soulless dialogue to progress the plot, also when I say NPC's I legit mean in canon the story shows how they just repeat the same dialogue because the story isn't based on the anime but instead the games which is a major downside given that it creates the problem of boring characters that are just one offs. Solution 1: This could have been alleviated by basing the actual world with a mix between PokeMMO and Pokemon anime. A mix of the PokeMMO system for pokemon power with levels, IV'S, and other game mechanics would create the power structure for the story and the anime world could have made the world building story so much better. Issue 2: Secondly, the stupid system tasks everyone in the pokemon world has to do are so dumb because they just make the story even more linear than it already is. Solution 2: All that really needed to happen was making it so that the Earth people were randomly dropped in the world with no directions. This would allow for unexpected Earth people to find rare items or Pokemon with them slowly figuring things out. Even then with the Mc's knowledge he would be one step ahead. Conclusion: That's the reason why I don't like the story and how I think it should be improved. (Note: A better idea for the plot of the story would have been the Pokemon anime world, not knowing why and increasing amounts of random undocumented people ← (Earth people) were constantly appearing in their world. With the Earth world not knowing why people were disappearing and reappearing with Pokemon that they befriend while in the Pokemon world. This would have allowed for the main character's knowledge to still be important but at the same time, providing challenges for him to have to overcome. With our main character having challenges such as getting his first pokemon without money, finding a way to hide from the Pokemon government given that he has no identification or fighting against earth people who decided to join team rocket.) [Double Note: Also make it so that Earth people have their souls and not physical bodies in the pokemon world so that when they die, it damages their souls, which could have lasting consequences for dying there.]

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Its a fantastic Pokémon fanfic. I Never read such a fantastic Pokémon on Webnovel. Its unique. I recommend to read it, its Not Like the other Pokémon fanfics that Play in a heavely AU Pokémon world. I cant wait for more chapters to come out.

Haha its good one hope author dont drop it fast like others

I don't like the use of a level system. Even in the official mangas, it doesn't make sense to me. However, this is a VR world based on PokéMMO (you are a man of taste), so it's ok. I don't always like the choice of team for the MC but it's clear that he is not a Pokénerd that has watched Best Team videos and guides.

Cool take on a poke fan fix would love to see this continue

A fun read, and an awesome story!!! It is the perfect blend of journey and character writing!!!🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🐐👍

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