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Only on chapter 3 rn, and this isn’t meant to insult you, but you might want to work on making it seem like time passed in your novel. Whenever a day or something apparently passed, the way you write it is like only 5 minutes passed, if that makes sense. Just wanted to tell you so you can improve, but if you already know and are working on it, just ignore this. Have a good day though. (PS my paragraph comments usually come off as rude but I fr don’t really mean it like that despite most people thinking I do, so don’t take offense if I say smth negative)
You mean about his first death, right? Well, he died after about five minutes, but the world doesn't revolve around him, so it still continued on after his death. That's why there's so much incongruence between his perspective and God's (which fueled his confusion). 😎 And don't worry, I appreciate your comments! Whether its a bad or good comment, leaving a comment is still better than not~! 😆
Kw0z:Only on chapter 3 rn, and this isn’t meant to insult you, but you might want to work on making it seem like time passed in your novel. Whenever a day or something apparently passed, the way you write it is like only 5 minutes passed, if that makes sense. Just wanted to tell you so you can improve, but if you already know and are working on it, just ignore this. Have a good day though. (PS my paragraph comments usually come off as rude but I fr don’t really mean it like that despite most people thinking I do, so don’t take offense if I say smth negative)
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