Here are some things you can improve on : - Every characters seems so simple minded. There is literally no diversity in character personalities. Everybody seems to suffer young master syndrome - You should add more lore to the story. Your descriptions are too simple. While the quality we readers may search is not necessarily here, reading this book is worth a while and it keeps us constantly interested. I am looking forward to this novel and the others you may write in the future.
Meowder
Liked it!
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