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PokemonJoker
PokemonJokerLv311mth
2023-12-06 15:09

The writing quality is not bad even though there are some grammar and spelling mistakes. This fic is also updated frequently but the story is not good. Idk why I’m reading about a 6 year old for more then a couple chapters. The pacing is weird and it’s boring to read I’m surprised there has not been a lower review sooner. The time Skip chapters really sold how little I wanted to read anymore.

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Thot_Slaughterer
Thot_SlaughtererAuthor

Despite the initial disappointment I felt upon learning that my story did not meet your expectations, I am able to comprehend your perspective. It took me quite a while to fully embrace your feedback, as I must admit that I am somewhat susceptible to criticism. I genuinely appreciate your input, and if you happen to have the time, I would greatly appreciate it if you could also peruse another fanfiction piece I am currently working on and provide me with your thoughts on whether or not my writing has improved.

Seyitan_Odufalu
Seyitan_OdufaluLv12

You’re already ahead of most authors with the fact that you’re able to take criticism and use that to improve. You’ll be surprised on the number of authors I’ve seen arguing with their readers even tho their readers are making valid points on why they don’t like the book.✍️✊

Thot_Slaughterer:Despite the initial disappointment I felt upon learning that my story did not meet your expectations, I am able to comprehend your perspective. It took me quite a while to fully embrace your feedback, as I must admit that I am somewhat susceptible to criticism. I genuinely appreciate your input, and if you happen to have the time, I would greatly appreciate it if you could also peruse another fanfiction piece I am currently working on and provide me with your thoughts on whether or not my writing has improved.
PokemonJoker
PokemonJokerLv3

Yeah I was not trying to be hurtful or anything like that I’ll look at you other fic

Thot_Slaughterer:Despite the initial disappointment I felt upon learning that my story did not meet your expectations, I am able to comprehend your perspective. It took me quite a while to fully embrace your feedback, as I must admit that I am somewhat susceptible to criticism. I genuinely appreciate your input, and if you happen to have the time, I would greatly appreciate it if you could also peruse another fanfiction piece I am currently working on and provide me with your thoughts on whether or not my writing has improved.
Thot_Slaughterer
Thot_SlaughtererAuthor

Thank you.

Seyitan_Odufalu:You’re already ahead of most authors with the fact that you’re able to take criticism and use that to improve. You’ll be surprised on the number of authors I’ve seen arguing with their readers even tho their readers are making valid points on why they don’t like the book.✍️✊
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Thot_Slaughterer
Thot_SlaughtererAuthor

Thank you for your response. I eagerly await your review.

PokemonJoker:Yeah I was not trying to be hurtful or anything like that I’ll look at you other fic
Quake_Midaro
Quake_MidaroLv14

I've read a bit of your fics and I have to say the only thing keeping me from bookmarking these fics and continuing to read them is the monotony and the horrible pacing for the starting 5-10 chapters way too much time spent with childhood arcs or trying to set up the beggining if you clean up your pacing a bit and avoid Childhood arcs in the future I'd likely read one of your fics because the grammer and your willingness to take criticism give you piints above most on WN but this fic is just far too drawn out with the childhood ordeal for my taste some may enjoy it others may just skip it but it irks me to no end to constantly read about a child protagonist regardless of a fics genre just can't develop any interest in learning about a MC under 15-16 at minimum otherwise grammer is good so is sentence structure and defining dialogue hope to see how a new fic turns out once you get around to finishing one if these but I can't bring myself to get past Ch.5 on this fic without getting bored and struggling to finish Ch.5 maybe a rewrite eventually but itherwise I'll skip on this one thanks for the content regardless

Thot_Slaughterer:Thank you for your response. I eagerly await your review.
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