Quake_Midaro

Ruby and Yang?

Complete stupidity here…

Ya know as the first chapter in a couple weeks after a half year Haitus I gotta admit this chapter read more as a completely different fic if it wasn’t for the Stat card at the end I wouldn’t have noticed it wasn’t a different fic entirely… gotta say think due to inconsistency in iPad and how this chapter just felt entirely random and more like a info dump than anything productive I think I’m gonna remove this from my Library I’ll give it 1-2 more chapter before I make my decision on that depending on how long they take to get passed

The grammar is atrocious and poorly done honestly this fic is too much of a headache to read to be good 1/5 simply because this site doesn’t allow 0/5 reviews

I was good with everything until you said you were gonna slap Marvel Dc and One Punch man into it nah not interested anymore it’s gonna be a shit show trying to balance that to make it even somewhat decently power scaled and I don’t see a Smut fic author putting that kind of effort in honestly I might check back in if you make it past 50 chapters but I don’t see this fic succeeding at all you took Solo Leveling and not only hamstringed the thing that made Sun Jinwoo a cool character and made the world a absurdly convoluted mess by slapping shit against a wall and hoping it’ll stick nah I’m good

Solid good smut and grammer looking forward to more

So she’s a Dominion Assassin honestly kinda disappointed the Dominion are the exact kind of people she ought to despise as they are just the High Elven version of the Nords that raided her home and slaughtered her people

First off getting my one good critique out there he Grammer is solid and a few changes are nice but the vast majority of this fic is Meh completely and totaly boring and bland l tried to give this fic a second go since it finally got updated figured my annoyance with work tainted my initial opinion nah it really is just meh 2.5/5 and I still can’t get over just how generally Meh the whole thing is the MC is boring the Story is bland and not well thought out the Smut’s even Meh like bro it’s genuinely impressive how cinsistently Meh the story is you play it too safe crippling this story by hamstringing the potential due to worrying about the original storyline this is a Fanfic it’s supposed to be AU but nah can’t possibly write about something interesting or cool right what if the original does it different it’s apparently a worry that not following the original story nearly verbatim is bad your fine with making Ainz a Human in which the entire Guild of Nazarick was founded on being against but having a bit of originality or change to the story no no no taboo right? That’s just boring and honestly bad writing this fic isn’t honestly worth reading adding a couple Smut scenes isn’t enough to have any interest there’s already pretty good Overlord Smut out there your story is far to rigid and predictable and the SI Ainz is a sham the fic isn’t really worth the time invested unless it’s as a time waster waiting for other fics to be updated definitely not a priority read which Is disappointing seems like Overlord is cursed to have subpar fanfics all around

This is gonna be a headache to read and try and decipher yeah not for me good luck but overly complicating the reading like that is gonna turn off quite a few I get it’s a try at an new gag/trope but honestly it doesn’t feel right something like Bakugan or Bey lace fine it’s already a thing but with Pokemon hearing Ventus or Pyris instead of Flying and Fire feels of putting