webnovel
CruelReality
CruelRealityLv41yr
2022-11-19 07:17

Tldr; It is a mixed bag with the potential to get better. The story is realistic and I’m fine with the pacing, the problem is the MC is average at best in terms of intelligence and below average in creativity so without plot armor I do not see how he will survive. Longer review: Believe it or not, I don’t dislike how the MC is being beaten down. The idea of dropping a competent mc into a rough situation and seeing him fulfillingly get stronger bit by bit can make for an excellent story. My issue is that the mc does not appear to be competent at all. Sure, he seems to be quite hardworking and has passable willpower. But he is incredibly uncreative and dull. Seeing an average person thrown into a very miserable situation is not particularly fun to read because without plot armor that average person will die 99% of the time. Thus, I feel like the author will have to introduce plot armor or to suddenly drastically increase the MCs intelligence if he does not want the MC to die the second he meets the enemy, and that makes for poor writing.

Liked by 64 people

LIKE
Replies2
merlin_
merlin_Lv14

I feel like intelligence boost is rational, with experience, Takuma simply gained ability to act better on preexisting intelligence

Keyaruga_Tsuki
Keyaruga_TsukiLv3

Potential to get better bucks you read 18 chapters you didn't give it an opportunity.Now people like me have to read this story and find out for themselves if it's good or bad.SHAME ON YOU, YOU HAD ONE JOB and you can't even post a trustworthy review.

Other Reviews
Related Stories

Creating Manga Of One Piece In Pirates World Become My Ultimate Goal!

Rob was a high-level hacker and wanted by many government organizations because he leaked the secrets of many countries. So he didn't dare to come out of his hiding much. Since he was alone, he lived a difficult life, which that he found the joy and the excitement of life in only two things: The rule of the Internet, and the anime world. One day he came across an interesting advertisement on his personal computer that turned his life upside down. [Ding!] [The art publishing system is being prepared...] [The system is ready!] From that time onwards his goal became to draw One Piece manga in the pirates' world! And make the great era of pirates even more chaotic! ¶¶¶¶¶ Author: BlackStar_BH (Me) ¶¶¶¶¶ Note: Needless to say, this book has the same idea as "Creating The Manga Of Naruto On Naruto World Become My Ultimate Goal!" But here it applies to the world of One Piece, I was inspired by the idea and I wanted to apply it to the world of One Piece, and I hope it succeeds, of course, there will be a conspiracy and I will make sure to improve the story according to the readers opinions. ¶¶¶¶¶ As for publishing chapters, it would depend entirely on the interaction the story receives, whether it is 4 chapters a day or 2 chapters or 1 chapter or 0 chapters... It all depends on the readers' enthusiasm for this interesting book. ¶¶¶¶¶ I don't own One Piece nor do I own its characters, all I own is the protagonist, after all, this is just a fanfic without any profit, just for fun. I don't own Bleach, Attack on titan, Hunter X Hunter, Naruto, and I don't own their characters. ¶¶¶¶¶ EXTRA TAGS: #ATTACKONTITAN #HUNTERXHUNTER ¶¶¶¶¶ My Patreon: https://www.patreon.com/BlackStar_BH (+30 Chapters ahead Webnovel.) My Ko-fi: (New) https://ko-fi.com/blackstar_bh (+30 Chapters ahead Webnovel.)

BlackStar_BH · Anime & Comics
4.7
821 Chs