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1stDaoistOfReading
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2022-08-03 23:24

I feel as though the writing quality could be improved as the author's descriptive ability is currently lacking but it's not actually bad enough for u to repulse it its actually quite doable basically a cake with all the ingredients but missing the icing that makes it look better and more attractive. The book all in all albeit 1 chapter isn't too bad and I can say that its a good first try for the author

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Enigma21
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Thankyou for the review. I try to keep things simple but still create a solid image in the reader without overdoing things and making it complicated. I hope we satisfy you in future chapters.[img=update]

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Wowey! Someone call an ambulance because I have no breath left! Just jokes. This debut chapter is one of, if not the best chapter I have read on this website. It includes many elements such as the beginnings of great character structure as well as building this fantastic world. I feel like I relate dearly to the main character and even made be shed a tear once or twice. I do have a few things I would like to suggest to a new author such as this brilliant one. I believe the characters should be balanced between genders and race so that it reaches and relates to the vaster majority of people. Then we can go main stream baby! I also LOVE the early mentions of the main character’s north-eastern roots and how he used to kick the sand out of boredom out the front of his bedroom window. I also use to do this but instead of sand, it was my hamster. Another point I would like to bring up during this opportunity to contact such an epic author is that your choice of title is perfect for such a tone and storyline. Even though we have not yet been emerged into the world of time in the story, I feel that I have been deeply impacted as time travels super fast while reading this book because of how emerged I get when reading it. I know for a fact that other readers feel the same way. For me, I have spent 4 hours so far reading over this 1st chapter and drawing what I believe the characters and world looks like. I have also ordered a custom bed spread from Etsy with my drawing on it. 5 stars any day.

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