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Pucker_faceLv31yr
2023-10-23 05:25

As much as I enjoyed this book, i can't help but feel disappointed, it started out strong and midway it began to feel rushed. It has an amazing and captivating storyline, this book could have easily been 500 chapters and wouldn't feel like it was dragging instead it would have been more fleshed out, and could have reached it's full potential . I really love the charactes and wished the author put more attention on characters like ozais, lux and even xaloc family, like what happened to them? , a lot felt unfinished. At a point the book became all tell and no show . The war and final battle was beyond disappointing, the author just told us the battle was hard and ares, Selena and the other guy died nothing more, and the revenge fell flat xalox didn't even kill nora who practically killed him in the beginning. All in all so much wasted potential especially the school arc, the romance was the only saving grace and it felt rushed too but i like how mature it also felt.

Atlantis: The Twilight of the gods [BL]

Dark_Scholars
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204 Chs

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Thank you for the review. Honestly. I know I did some things wrong by Atlantis and there are many plot holes. Too much characters, too little development. I did enjoy writing the book but my technique and skills were poorer and I did not do it justice. I am a much better writer now, (I hope so) and I feel more courageous writing a long length novel. If you do not mind checking out my book, The Elusive Bookkeeper and giving it a try. If you like it and read it, I want you to give me a warning if the middle starts to fall flat or feels rushed. That is if it is not too much trouble and you like the kind of story.Thanks for reading Atlantis.

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Pucker_face
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I will check it out, thanks for taking my constructive criticism and hope you continue to grow as a writer. Good luck😁

Dark_Scholars:Thank you for the review. Honestly. I know I did some things wrong by Atlantis and there are many plot holes. Too much characters, too little development. I did enjoy writing the book but my technique and skills were poorer and I did not do it justice. I am a much better writer now, (I hope so) and I feel more courageous writing a long length novel. If you do not mind checking out my book, The Elusive Bookkeeper and giving it a try. If you like it and read it, I want you to give me a warning if the middle starts to fall flat or feels rushed. That is if it is not too much trouble and you like the kind of story.Thanks for reading Atlantis.
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