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FireEngineLv42yr
2021-11-23 10:43

Great story so far. I really like Shade's character, his qualities are unique to say the least. His suspicion towards people might actually be a good thing in this survival game. Can't wait to see what happens inside his mind as he goes on playing for his life. The writing quality well... I didn't expect such clean pages from a writer here in this site. There are some paragraphs where active voice could be used to reduce the word redundancy, but that's just me nitpicking. The reader can expect a smooth read without being interrupted by errors. Story is unfolding through a third point of view. I have no complaints about the pacing of the book as well. I can't really say anything about the world building yet but this novel has the potential to keep a reader hooked. The author has smartly used the trending elements here (death game, unsocial mc, game world, etc). However, I believe the author will make a difference which hundreds of other writers fail at doing.

Survival Zer0

Prince_nonchalant
4.5
155 Chs

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Prince_nonchalant
Prince_nonchalantAuthor

Thank you for the review!

2yr
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Prince_nonchalant
Prince_nonchalantAuthor

Hello, readers! I'm just writing this review to give a little more insight into my book. It gets into the story quickly so it's not bad pacing-wise. However, the first few chapters might feel like it's lacking in meaning. Like it may feel as if the characters are simply just in the game to survive. But I urge you to continue past this as the plot gets very interesting further down. You'll be able to feel the drive and the direction that I want the story to go in. And there's a lot of foreshadowings as well so pay attention to them. Lastly, if you like this book after reading then please check out my other book called The Mind World And The Outcast Hero. In some ways, it's even better than this one. So please give it a try as I'm sure you won't be disappointed. I appreciate the support!

2yr

BrightBrain256
BrightBrain256Lv3

When it comes to storylines about survival whether in movies or novels. I will definitely be among the top readers but what makes a story a different one is the author. With such a great author, I'm sure this will make one keep begging for more. Keeping going author 💪💪you can do it.

2yr
GentleFlame27
GentleFlame27Lv4

This book is decent, The grammatical errors look non-existent and the story is starting at a good pace, The starring is quite mysterious, U think The reader who likes to read some mystery and gaming novel they would love this novel However, there are fewer details about the surroundings and characters

2yr
SoftFingers
SoftFingersLv1

Writing Quality: Good writing quality that is rare on this app. Could be better with more realistic/mature dialogue, but I guess that is a personal preference since some people are into characters who act like ten year olds so still five stars. Updating Stabibility: Good. Story Development: Interesting plot. Bad world building that throws you in without proper build up. Character Design: Horrible characters. Attempts to make a cold main character, does this extremely poorly. Main reason I dropped this. Would be better with a shounen tag and a more generic shounen personality as author’s style seems tailored to shounen. World Background: Interesting, needs better buildup Overall: Interesting plot, poor execution. Recommend making a shounen protagonist for future novels. Would recommend to people interested in shounen type novels, just not my personal taste.

2yr
JustThatBoredGuy
JustThatBoredGuyLv4

. diving in, wish me luck .

2yr
Zwelton
ZweltonLv11

Reveal spoiler

2yr
JustThatBoredGuy
JustThatBoredGuyLv4

....Good soup... . . . . . . . . . . .

2yr
EvileyeEvil
EvileyeEvilLv2

Hoho, 10th review. Excellent.

2yr
Reo_
Reo_Lv1

The plot is interesting. The writing quality is good, but still needs some work. Story develops nicely so I had no problems with that. I would like to see how Shade's character goes on in the story(the way he thinks etc.) Over all good work author!

2yr
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