Review Detail of Yuki_08 in SECOND LIFE, AN IDOL.

It's a good story plot and it's quite interesting. The mc have a great character development. There are some spelling errors and grammatical errors, might want to fix it. Try to use brackets like ( ) or [ ] for the system mission or status plate so they don't mess up with some paragraphs. Label the conversation on who's talking so they know who's talking with the mc for example " are you okay honey?" - Ace's mom. Sorry if you find it quite offending author