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Riyah404
Riyah404Lv43yr
2021-06-06 15:57

This is a gripping story. A page-turner. The pacing was nice and easy to follow. You can instantly feel the MC's emotion. Great job, author! Keep on writing! :) I want to read more! :)

The Mafia Game ( Hired Gun )

ayen_zone
4.9
60 Chs

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Thank you~ 😊😁💕

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kuhaku_sora
kuhaku_soraLv3

This is a fun story to read! The synopsis is great, and I love it! if the author can execute this perfectly, then you can have my 10 stars!!!! The only thing that I'd like to mention is the usage of onomatopoeia. It is okay to use it, but it would be better if you can add more depth into it. For an example the BAAANG could be improve like "I heard a blaring shot coming from elsewhere. It was like a sond of something cracking abruptly..." something like that.

3yr

Jo_J
Jo_JLv13

A great cover page! Nicely written synopsis, which makes me curious about the content. You have an interesting concept for your story. The plot is intriguing. You're doing well! Good luck with the contest! I wish I could have more power stones ;)

3yr
SpilledInk
SpilledInkLv5

I like this! This book has a truly beautiful storyline.💕 I really like how the author depicts the emotions of the characters in each scene. It's subtle, realistic and exact. The story flows so naturally and so it's easy for readers to follow. Nice work, author.👏👏👏

3yr
Blackpaint
BlackpaintLv2

First few chapters already hooked me in! I love how the author depicts the MC's emotions. It felt so realistic. I also like that you give space for readers to paint their own imagination regarding the world building because I have the same thoughts when I write. This story will stay in my library!~

3yr
Cher_Yan
Cher_YanLv1

Hey author! I hope everything is going great for you. ✨I read your book and by far it’s one of the greatest works I’ve read here on Webnovel. I loved all the complexity in your characters and the way you set up your scenes. I think you are an amazing writer. 😍 You have such a way with words, and I love your writing style. Literally cannot wait to read more! If you ever have any free time, you should check out my new novel UnderHerSkin. I think you would really enjoy reading it. But if you don’t have time, I totally understand! Best of luck reading & writing!! This message turned out longer than I thought, but have a wonderful day!!!❤️❤️❤️

3yr
Samantha_R_Samuel
Samantha_R_SamuelLv2

So far I am loving what I am reading, there are a few grammatical errors but all of nothing that can’t be easily corrected🤗 I would recommend this book it is quite interesting to read I think you all might agree with me💕🤗Kudos to the author

3yr
Itsuki_Suzuki
Itsuki_SuzukiLv3

Writing Quality: Good and readable Updating Stability: Superb and always updated! Story Development: Nice pacing Character Design: It's nice and clean World Background: Had enough to engage more readers.

3yr
Mayemura
MayemuraLv2

This is a very good story. I love how you give a detailed description of your characters and setting .However, I rated it 4.8 because of the errors . The tenses mix-up cause the grammar to be erratic. Please correct that and this will be a very catchy story. With that being said, overall you have great potential and I am going to be reading this story too. Already in my library 😃. I know that I want to journey with Ava to the end

3yr
Empzze
EmpzzeLv12

Nice work author, intriguing plot and interesting storyline, the story had me hooked in the first chapter, and I really like the pacing too. keep up the good work author i’m cheering for you and i added it to my library already.

3yr
REaper
REaperLv4

Interesting storyline and unique plot, you can display a lot of character development in the novel, writing needs to be improved otherwise interesting novel, hope to see interesting updates in future

3yr
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