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Dragonia_101
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2021-05-24 17:04

Good and interesting story but there is some problems in the way the author sets the plotline. Like chapter 51 should be in 50 place and 50 should be in 51 place as 51 explains he story and if u directly go to Ch 50, it leaves alot of questions and plot holes for the reader as in end of Ch 49, MC said she would be in caves and suddenly she is fighting in Ch 50. So set the storyline in a clear line or give some indication. The reason I say indication is that before volume 3 she is a secret agent but suddenly in volume 3, she is said to be in college. U should also give some clear info about that. Other than some small mistakes like this, this storyline is good. Another thing I recommend is dividing long chapters into small parts. First 10-20 chapters are too long and some people likes to read shorter chapter( like me) in comparison your volume 3 chapters are of correct length

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Thanks for your comments ! It's just a mistake, thanks for pointing it out ! I'll reverse 50 and 51 at once. I hear you about shorter chapters. I've divided them already, because this was original written for another website where people tend to read on computer, not mobile. As for Frances being a secret agent, I'm pretty sure it is mentioned she is an intern in between her classes. I'll get back to it. Thanks again for taking the time to review.

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Dragonia_101
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I guess I missed the intern part maybe or misunderstood what it meant.

d_elfe:Thanks for your comments ! It's just a mistake, thanks for pointing it out ! I'll reverse 50 and 51 at once. I hear you about shorter chapters. I've divided them already, because this was original written for another website where people tend to read on computer, not mobile. As for Frances being a secret agent, I'm pretty sure it is mentioned she is an intern in between her classes. I'll get back to it. Thanks again for taking the time to review.
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d_elfe
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I added a note as per your comment. I hope it will be clearer once I get to write the missing part 2 ! Thanks anyway, it's always precious to have feedback.

Dragonia_101:I guess I missed the intern part maybe or misunderstood what it meant.
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