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Jasonenrick
JasonenrickLv144yr
2020-11-02 22:35

Writing Quality 2-Stars Story Development 1-Star Character Design 1-Star Updating Stability 3-Stars World Background 3-Stars Gilgamesh's character isn't present at all even thought the Author always says that Gil influences the Mc. The Mc is also weak af and the Story is written like a Diary . Etc etc etc I am too lazy,...again !

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Fanfiction_Fanatic
Fanfiction_FanaticLv1

How is the writing quality 2 stars? you're being very kind. English might not be his first language but the grammar is horrible and it's like the story was written by a four-year-old.

Jasonenrick
JasonenrickLv14

I know ;)

Fanfiction_Fanatic:How is the writing quality 2 stars? you're being very kind. English might not be his first language but the grammar is horrible and it's like the story was written by a four-year-old.
CH405Kaiser
CH405KaiserLv6

Each paragraph is one sentence. Sometimes there aren’t even periods

Fanfiction_Fanatic:How is the writing quality 2 stars? you're being very kind. English might not be his first language but the grammar is horrible and it's like the story was written by a four-year-old.
Jasonenrick
JasonenrickLv14

You are retarded

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Jasonenrick
JasonenrickLv14

you don't even know how to spell retarded, idiot

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Jasonenrick
JasonenrickLv14

Also doesn't change the fact that you're retarded.

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Jasonenrick
JasonenrickLv14

Lol, Imagine being stupid...Oh. Wait, you are unreasonable and stupid! You were the one to respond to my comment with 'retarded' even though you don't know how to write the word Imao. I just basically did the same thing you did because arguing with a person who commented 'Retarded' to a reasonable review with nothing else and even wrote it wrong.....what should I do? You see, you don't even have common sense and that's sad! Are you an orphan and we're in a bad orphanage where they didn't help you to understand society and how to argue? Because that's what it looks like to me! Ridiculous how absurd an individual can be! Learn to argue and how to write properly because I am doing better and English isn't even my mother language!

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Jasonenrick
JasonenrickLv14

Look at your comments and then mine. Mine make Sense, are structured, and have logic behind it. Yours are written by a kid that does cry every time he/she doesn't get what it wants! I bet your life sucks! I can imagine what your life is like. No girlfriend, bad grades in school, and your friends aren't your friends but just people that are bored and need a distraction! While I have a lot of friends, make money, and have a girlfriend while being supported by a loving family! You and I are Worlds apart!

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toocareful
toocarefulLv14

My god. He pulled out the gf card

Jasonenrick:Look at your comments and then mine. Mine make Sense, are structured, and have logic behind it. Yours are written by a kid that does cry every time he/she doesn't get what it wants! I bet your life sucks! I can imagine what your life is like. No girlfriend, bad grades in school, and your friends aren't your friends but just people that are bored and need a distraction! While I have a lot of friends, make money, and have a girlfriend while being supported by a loving family! You and I are Worlds apart!
origin_seth
origin_sethLv4

can you speak or write in indonesian but with dialect from west/east java ? or japanese or even chinese, well, ? he do what he can do, my english writing is bad, soooo bad that you will puke at my face, but at least i try to understand you, to talk with you, to share with you, and please not all people using english for daily. ahh, pardon my wording. as you know, im not native english speak. no offense please.

dozkiller07
dozkiller07Lv4

yeah.mc is supposed to be influenced by gilgamesh.but u think Gilgamesh is all about being a shitty edge lord then u r mistaken. but I can cope with that. the thing is author really nerfed mc for sure. u really thing that a demigod can only have arm strength of 450 kg?then u r stupid because that a peak human strenth. now u will be talking shit about mc being child and he need to be mature to build muscle yadha yadha yadha. but take training chapter.in it it's shows mc when 10 year old can lift weight of 1 ton effortlessly.buy after 2 chapter (quirk assesment) he can only output 450 kg of strength when he tried hard to break it. now some bitches gonna pull shit like mc hiding his strength from others kind a excuse from their ass.for those he won't.because he is Gilgamesh he won't accept defeat from a lowly measuring device.and he won't hide his stregth.he may be hide trumbcards but will never allows others to look down on him.he is that pridefull and arrogent to do otherwise. for u that I replied(I don't remember ur name)I didn't even read the damn fic.it only takes me checking 2 chapters to understand wheather mc got nerfed or not.if u don't even have braincell to do that then pls stop replying.

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iwantyouinmyswamp
iwantyouinmyswampLv4

dozkiller07
dozkiller07Lv4

are u an idiot or what.we are talking about Gilgamesh here for god sake.he isn't your avg joe.he can literally have strength to one punch allmight in strength alone. and I wrote in the previous review that the author nerfed the charecter and given exact chapters in where it happened. if u don't have the braincells to comprehend what I even said then pls shut the **** up and suck ur dick in a corner of ur room dick head.

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Mekachi_Kun
Mekachi_KunLv2

Bruh at least learn to appreciate when you don't even write fanfiction.

Mekachi_Kun
Mekachi_KunLv2

but still, i hate it when Author claims that the mc is influenced by Gilgamesh's character when Author doesn't even know Gilgamesh's personality.

Jasonenrick
JasonenrickLv14

I did write.....but it wasn't for me and back then my English was hella bad, like awful! Also, why do I have to appreciate it?

Mekachi_Kun:Bruh at least learn to appreciate when you don't even write fanfiction.
Darudadu
DarudaduLv14

Jasonenrick:Look at your comments and then mine. Mine make Sense, are structured, and have logic behind it. Yours are written by a kid that does cry every time he/she doesn't get what it wants! I bet your life sucks! I can imagine what your life is like. No girlfriend, bad grades in school, and your friends aren't your friends but just people that are bored and need a distraction! While I have a lot of friends, make money, and have a girlfriend while being supported by a loving family! You and I are Worlds apart!
Washuru
WashuruLv13

retarded* please learn how to spell and correct your mistakes

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lazyotaku68
lazyotaku68Lv1

Stop lying, you wrote it like that because you’ve only ever completed Primary Education you Special ED kid.

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iwantyouinmyswamp
iwantyouinmyswampLv4

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