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2021-01-20 16:26

First review but this... Honestly this is a good fic like stop reading my review and read this masterpiece, i love the original concepts such as Winter Guard and the take on Creel and every character has nice development and its a great story with good original concepts and a good plot with characters that are really good. grammar is nigh perfect with only slight easily fixed errors, the world building is nice like the expansion on things like the savage lands and the fic honestly seems like a proffesional writer most times. If you like Ben 10 and Marvel this is for you. If I were to rate it. Plot: 10/10 The concepts are original, however it starts a tad slow in the beginning but in my opinion it was fine some may not enjoy the slower beginning pace but stay strong and keep reading. Character design and development 10/10 Characters dont start perfect but they steadily get better and learn from previous mistakes really giving the readers satisfaction when you see our amazing MC learn and grow as the story progresses, like author really nailed the progression speed, not too slow, not too quick. World Building Again 10/10 Since its a fic it doesnt need much world building since marvel itself does that, however it does have interesting spins on already existing places or comepletely new ones. Like the secret bases in the Hydra War Arc Grammar 9.9/10 like honestly it really is top notch and at the beginning there were slight mistakes but it steadily improved so I would give it 10/10 but those havent been edited. All in all its an amazing fic with an amazing author, take my vote man.

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Seriously??

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Areize
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don't read this it started good but along the way it seems too much elongated and stretched for god what reason scenes to that should be two second is stretched very much long the MC continue to be thrown between knowing the knowledge of marvel and not knowing at all the MC seems to have some issues of trust he trust abunch of super spies a socially inept person and a mentally challenged person he calls them friends directly tell who ever listen that he is from another world with endless alien abilities he reveals his secret early on he put himself at the servent of others likely the MC is a submissive and tend to humiliation fetich the MC have is serving not like a si but as an oc aide kick to the avengers and the rest of shield the author seems to have some sjw leaning as he is planning to introduce the self insert of Kamala khan the author make the MC build things as somewhat of a way to show his .so called intelligence yet the things he build always have no effect for example he design a armour yet the armour almost if not break all the time also the author seems to force the MC to not go all out on his creation for no other reason as to continue to prolong the story for example he make an armour yet he make it the size of backpack to be weared instead of making a nanobot armour that is stored in their spine like bleeding edge iron man armor and for a fact the MC seems to have absurd marvel knowledge so he should be know this also the author tends to add irrelevant scenes just to prolong the chapters I noticed this since he started with patreon thing with chapters about character that you will never care about that much like agents of shield crew or the rest shield to the point it's just skip skip and skip the MC tends to frustrate alot of the times for naivity and cluenesse es also the MC has no future goals or aspirations outside of being avengers best lapdos and sidekick the author seems to not notice that his character lost its charms he reveals his weakness gets trashed alot and not using his alien transformations to their full potential and now he revealed his secret of being a transmigrator to his she hulk girlfriend of his and added deadpool to the mix so basically the MC has become a trash oc without any desires to grow stronger or get anything yet the author ses hell bent on doing his version of the movies without knowing he already screwed the plot all together also the author seems to try to do some foreshadowing yet he truly doing it in a stupidest way possible the MC says he talked to Tony about thanos yet he made no further comment outside of that he didn't tell he has some way of defeating him or anything just yeah there is thanos the MC seems to not has the marvel knowledge at the moment needs only when the author allows it for example he doesn't suspect the aether the tessarect or even Loki sceptre to be infinity stones or anything he let those big events that is related to them just slip by to conclude the story was very good at the start yet get down hill we earlier to the point that most of the earlier readers left it the author seems to have dropped to trap of patreon yes men and huge ego as he thinks as his story doesn't have anyone who truly criticize him over it I mean the narrative not the grammar and he doesn't even realize or ask about it overall not a good read

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