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Mahmoud_Schahed
Mahmoud_SchahedLv24yr
2020-10-26 19:58

I'm Mahmoud, aka DesertChocolate. I don't mind you posting this, but if you could write my name correctly and maybe add a link to the OG story, I would appreciate it. Thank you.

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stefanus101
stefanus101Lv14

why don't you post your story on this site too??? I'm a bit curious

prometheus
prometheusLv5

He’d have to rewrite 130 or so chapters since you cant just copy and paste it

stefanus101:why don't you post your story on this site too??? I'm a bit curious
Kopie
KopieLv2

ActualLy You can

prometheus:He’d have to rewrite 130 or so chapters since you cant just copy and paste it
prometheus
prometheusLv5

Huh i thought that wasn’t a thing On here

Kopie:ActualLy You can
TheGreatest1
TheGreatest1Lv4

you can on your computer

prometheus:Huh i thought that wasn’t a thing On here
Kopie
KopieLv2

if you go from inkstone you can do it even from phone

TheGreatest1:you can on your computer
samsara
samsaraLv5

respect

solo_fanfictioning
solo_fanfictioningLv2

what platfom is it on

Seud
SeudLv4

Ah so you’re the author with below average intelligence. (According to a lot of readers comments and reviews.)

Mahmoud_Schahed
Mahmoud_SchahedLv2

So I've been told. Seems weird to insult someone for what is just a fanfic. It ain't something that is personally attacking anyone, ya know?

Seud:Ah so you’re the author with below average intelligence. (According to a lot of readers comments and reviews.)
BiPanda
BiPandaLv13

Hi. I wanted to thank you for this fanfic its a fun read. I’m reading it on The fanfic.net app and have no clue how the comments work there so im putting it here. Thank you for devoting your time to it.

Mahmoud_Schahed:So I've been told. Seems weird to insult someone for what is just a fanfic. It ain't something that is personally attacking anyone, ya know?
GM43ver
GM43verLv13

you may now kiss my ass.

BiPanda:Hi. I wanted to thank you for this fanfic its a fun read. I’m reading it on The fanfic.net app and have no clue how the comments work there so im putting it here. Thank you for devoting your time to it.
Mahmoud_Schahed
Mahmoud_SchahedLv2

That is a very odd thing to say to someone who hasn't said anything to you.

GM43ver:you may now kiss my ass.
Mahmoud_Schahed
Mahmoud_SchahedLv2

Thank you man. I appreciate that. It makes me glad when people enjoy this story.

BiPanda:Hi. I wanted to thank you for this fanfic its a fun read. I’m reading it on The fanfic.net app and have no clue how the comments work there so im putting it here. Thank you for devoting your time to it.
GM43ver
GM43verLv13

you can kiss ass now

Mahmoud_Schahed:That is a very odd thing to say to someone who hasn't said anything to you.
Mahmoud_Schahed
Mahmoud_SchahedLv2

That's better. If you hate the story, then come at me not at others. I assure you, I've been hit with a lot more than you can toss my way. Otherwise, have a pleasant day and a good Thanksgiving.

GM43ver:you can kiss ass now
GM43ver
GM43verLv13

ok come here and kiss it 😘

Mahmoud_Schahed:That's better. If you hate the story, then come at me not at others. I assure you, I've been hit with a lot more than you can toss my way. Otherwise, have a pleasant day and a good Thanksgiving.
Mahmoud_Schahed
Mahmoud_SchahedLv2

Nah, I'm good kid. Good luck with whatever... this whole thing you do is. Bye.

GM43ver:ok come here and kiss it 😘
GM43ver
GM43verLv13

well someone didn't get the joke.

Mahmoud_Schahed:Nah, I'm good kid. Good luck with whatever... this whole thing you do is. Bye.
drewcifer82
drewcifer82Lv14

Shukran Jazeelan!

Other Reviews
Areize
AreizeLv5

don't read this it started good but along the way it seems too much elongated and stretched for god what reason scenes to that should be two second is stretched very much long the MC continue to be thrown between knowing the knowledge of marvel and not knowing at all the MC seems to have some issues of trust he trust abunch of super spies a socially inept person and a mentally challenged person he calls them friends directly tell who ever listen that he is from another world with endless alien abilities he reveals his secret early on he put himself at the servent of others likely the MC is a submissive and tend to humiliation fetich the MC have is serving not like a si but as an oc aide kick to the avengers and the rest of shield the author seems to have some sjw leaning as he is planning to introduce the self insert of Kamala khan the author make the MC build things as somewhat of a way to show his .so called intelligence yet the things he build always have no effect for example he design a armour yet the armour almost if not break all the time also the author seems to force the MC to not go all out on his creation for no other reason as to continue to prolong the story for example he make an armour yet he make it the size of backpack to be weared instead of making a nanobot armour that is stored in their spine like bleeding edge iron man armor and for a fact the MC seems to have absurd marvel knowledge so he should be know this also the author tends to add irrelevant scenes just to prolong the chapters I noticed this since he started with patreon thing with chapters about character that you will never care about that much like agents of shield crew or the rest shield to the point it's just skip skip and skip the MC tends to frustrate alot of the times for naivity and cluenesse es also the MC has no future goals or aspirations outside of being avengers best lapdos and sidekick the author seems to not notice that his character lost its charms he reveals his weakness gets trashed alot and not using his alien transformations to their full potential and now he revealed his secret of being a transmigrator to his she hulk girlfriend of his and added deadpool to the mix so basically the MC has become a trash oc without any desires to grow stronger or get anything yet the author ses hell bent on doing his version of the movies without knowing he already screwed the plot all together also the author seems to try to do some foreshadowing yet he truly doing it in a stupidest way possible the MC says he talked to Tony about thanos yet he made no further comment outside of that he didn't tell he has some way of defeating him or anything just yeah there is thanos the MC seems to not has the marvel knowledge at the moment needs only when the author allows it for example he doesn't suspect the aether the tessarect or even Loki sceptre to be infinity stones or anything he let those big events that is related to them just slip by to conclude the story was very good at the start yet get down hill we earlier to the point that most of the earlier readers left it the author seems to have dropped to trap of patreon yes men and huge ego as he thinks as his story doesn't have anyone who truly criticize him over it I mean the narrative not the grammar and he doesn't even realize or ask about it overall not a good read

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