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SabertoothX15
SabertoothX15Lv134yr
2020-09-10 22:03

Dude....before starting I would like to say that I love harem!!!! But a harem without any proper story..........not. I think that you should try to write this novel on a proper foundation i.e., Slice of life of Mc. Do you know that readers come to like an MC by seeing his daily life? They like the MC when they can understand him/her. I also want to say that I also don't like MC catching women like pokemons.

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Avi2112
Avi2112作者

Thank you for your review!!

SabertoothX15
SabertoothX15Lv13

Don't stress...this is your story....you can do anything.....I hope you can make this novel a slow-paced one when he grows up because I like a relaxing story with some action, romance, drama, comedy and lastly HAREM!!! And also, I like this novel (Also added to the library).

Avi2112:Thank you for your review!!
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Avi2112
Avi2112作者

SabertoothX15:Don't stress...this is your story....you can do anything.....I hope you can make this novel a slow-paced one when he grows up because I like a relaxing story with some action, romance, drama, comedy and lastly HAREM!!! And also, I like this novel (Also added to the library).
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YameteAuthorSan
YameteAuthorSanLv5

Im just here to support the author

Antigonus_99
Antigonus_99Lv3

will you continue your story????

SabertoothX15:Don't stress...this is your story....you can do anything.....I hope you can make this novel a slow-paced one when he grows up because I like a relaxing story with some action, romance, drama, comedy and lastly HAREM!!! And also, I like this novel (Also added to the library).
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SabertoothX15
SabertoothX15Lv13

I will........(When I have the mood to write)

Antigonus_99:will you continue your story????
frelvic
frelvicLv3

IO22
IO22Lv12

you forgot to mention that the MC is also a rapist

_EMI_
_EMI_Lv4

Precisely.

SabertoothX15
SabertoothX15Lv13

I wrote this review when this novel was about 9 chapters old......and the r*pe incident happened in the mid-30s chapter..... . . . It is just that I am too lazy to update this review......

IO22:you forgot to mention that the MC is also a rapist
NoBookNoLife
NoBookNoLifeLv14

IO22:you forgot to mention that the MC is also a rapist
LordOfLaziness
LordOfLazinessLv5

Thanks bro

IO22:you forgot to mention that the MC is also a rapist
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