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RJMidnight
RJMidnightLv34yr
2020-08-24 02:45

I’m going to say this first as a disclaimer: I do not like female-lead stories and I especially dislike romance. But your story is really good from how far i read (although your story is really good, I didn’t read far cause romance makes me cringe). Even though your plot line is cliché, I enjoy that your story is not. You are building the romance and I like that cause most people have couples get together in the blink of the eye without building to it. Your story is funny which kept me reading for a while cause of that comedy fill. And even if I do not like stories like this, for people who do, this is a good read. (Another note: please make sure to capitalize tv shows. Ex: Brooklyn Nine-Nine)

What a mess

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Okay, thanks a lot!

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