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Daoist689073
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2020-08-29 03:05

Good novel, but the grammar, structure, writing quality, etc, leaves a lot to be desired. Frequent spelling errors, incorrect or poor word choice, among other problems leaves me with no choice but to rate it as I did. the novel is above average for webnovel but thats not exactly a high bar.

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Anone
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I'll try to do better

Daoist689073
Daoist689073Lv3

Myself and likely quite a few others out there definitely appreciate your hard work, I just want to see the novel live up to the potential it has!

Anone:I'll try to do better
Anone
AnoneAuthor

thank you, I'll try my best with this. just so busy there's hardly time to edit

Daoist689073:Myself and likely quite a few others out there definitely appreciate your hard work, I just want to see the novel live up to the potential it has!
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There are allot of problems in this novel. Feels like wasted potential. First of the MC is stupid like almost brain dead when the author wants to make him out to be a genius. When in reality he is fucking retarded. He also gets walked over for the first 60+ chapters. The female "guardian" like the girl who is running the prison ****es him over a few times yet mc lets it go like noting happened.... Like totally forgotten not mentioned again. Lets not forget she helped in his execution, did not help him, beaten him half to death a few times, ****ed him over a few more times,.... And MC lets it go like noting happened.... For some reason mc asks her to join his "team" later. Are we supposed to forget all the shit she did to him? MC also acts arrogant for no reason when he is still a slave. Thinks he acts smug when he is still making money for the guy who killed him and acts all high and mighty for no reason. A few more problems are that the author makes allot of mistakes, and likes to keep the mc weak. MC levels up but author casually forgets about it and then lets mc level it up again and thus waste exp. And one of the biggest brain farts about this is when he finally uses his exp after not using it for no reason (to make the mc even more weak then he already is) he puts all his exp in like the slave "class" and then removes the class 30 minutes later (legit next chapter). So the author is just keeping mc weak for no reason and its really annoying at this point. Like imagine watching mc grind (even thou he is already stacking a shit ton exp but does not use it because "reasons") and then your reward is watching him basically delete the exp. And then he acts all high and mighty thinking he is a genius.... Author also can't remember his Tiers, like T1 <25 / T2 25-50 / T3 ... Then he ****ed it up the next time becouse he can't remember what he said the previous chapter. Also the later chapters are full of useless system text stuff just to run up word count. Chapters are also really short, there is like no substance in the chapters except useless system info. For example mc walking then rest of the chapter is his stills that author never uses because he thinks it will be to confusing for him to remember.... Also the R18 tag is a ? The only thing we got is that the guy who killed mc slept with the guardian (well that's in plied at least). All in all i'm super disapointed. I expected a badass MC but what we got is a whimp who gets walked all over and does not take revenge. I still can't belive he put all his exp in slave that he saved from like 25 chapters and then removes the class. Like i think this novel will turn out in a shitty hero saves the world kind of garbadge. Writing Quality ⭐⭐⭐⭐ Stability of Updates ⭐⭐⭐ Story Development⭐⭐⭐ Character Design⭐⭐ World Background⭐⭐⭐ Like MC is way to softhearted for this kind of novel I expected some dark stuff but mc can't even take revenge now so idk what it will turn out to be later in the novel. Also I think I read somewhere author does not want mc to be the owner of slaves??? LIke he can't be the reason for slaves? Are you for real what kind of garbage shit is that! Novel is full of slaves but mc can't own any? It should be one of his skills yet he can't be the reason for slaves ....... Also the dark classes are supposed to be feared yet everyone and there Nan shits on mc. Its like author just forgot about the perks. I feel like there is no progression. MC should be a dark necromancer yet he kills no1 and only has "monsters" under his control why no humans? Also the caps are hard to read.

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