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2020-06-06 16:04

Utterly incomprehensible, the author just skips around to the 'good' parts of stories without bothering to explain how the characters got their powers or how they got there or why they know each other or what's going on. I'd say logic goes out the window for the sake of plot but plot also goes out the window with the logic, we're left with the skeleton of some good scenes that would be interesting in a novel where you knew what was going on.

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