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hey dude do u still want to write this ff or did you give it up cause I am interested in writing about it

ok let's get this out of the way here this the most confusing ff i have ever read it had a really Really good idea but your execution was all over the place the mc character traits are unkown the development is unknown i dont even know where you were heading with any of this actually bro you had a really good idea why didn't you take advantage of it and i think that you leaned on the backroom part more than actual the mha part there was practically no development with any character other than the mc it seemed like you made everyone a background character that doesn't talk or have personality at all and dude your transitions are confusing my suggestion give the idea to someone else and start a whole new ff to right about the backrooms entirlely

i just can't say it anything but that its one of the best if not the best written mha ff like you really satisfied everything iIwanted to see even tho sometimes you actually forgot some character like all might for example or nezu but iIguess they served there purpose in the story so iIcant blame you for not adding them again i was so used to weird mha ff that i actually forgot what a well written one looks like even the introduction was great real great

well how should I start first i thought that the story was interesting interesting characters and other things but then the author changed some characters genders and iIwas ok with that but then he changed how the story went then it came falling if you going to change everything so drastically put a disclaimer first or do an original fanfic we are here read about mha not whatever you thought was ok

ok first things first it's a good work but is it amazing then no far from it it laterally took me 50 something chapters to see any kind of development from anyone other than the main character we didn't get any glimpse of any enemy except bioblast the more i read i try not to cringe and like most of the mha fanfics out there of course you included momo and hado in this somehow probably going to make them both his main love interest and probably midnight too somewhere along the line like the power systems you put are one of the most versatile but you didn't take advantage of that you could have copied some reference from hxh like gon rock paper scissors or kilua electricity

i know this fanfic ended like a year ago but to me it was really good not amazingly good but did its job good and my thoughts is that i think the author rushed to finish the fanfic out of stress of handling writing two fanfics at once so he took his chances and decided to finish it abruptly like really going to space dude you couldn't make a better ending and the whole stealing quirk felt wasted you know and overall it just felt like your rushed the last 30 chapters but you did build up a good climax although you fummbled the last fight It was an average read

honestly I am glad i read this fanfic it's nice to see someone innovate things not like all the other fanfics who slap system templates everywhere hoping it makes a good story he actually portrayed how these characters would genuinely react if they were real and anime character honestly 5 stars

honestly it's good to know a side of demon slayer that has been unexplored like I did think it but who would have thought someone would make it like i always thought what if a demon slayer killed another demon slayer

well i know the author will never see this since he stopped writing 2 years ago but i just found another fanfic with the same concept but done way better than you I just wanted to for you to see that the other fanfic succeeded where you failed mesribly

it's all good but dude did you have to have all these chapters under a pay wall that's not cool bro not cool at all