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The hero gets a new, not entirely clear ability. And instead of trying to figure it out, learn how to use it, try to do it as best as possible... He can't do anything yet, except in theory. Since the description may not be complete, side effects and disadvantages are unknown.

A strange hero. He was a nobody and in 5 minutes he easily became a cool successful hero. But let's forget about that. He stumbled upon the rasilniks in action, won and began to enjoy himself, forgetting that he was escaping from zombies and was responsible for a small group of survivors. And he enjoys not even his victory, but the sight of a raped girl.

Oh, and you can add normal communication to the hero. Simple, everyday, without a position of power, a normal dialogue. Otherwise, the hero just became a vampire, and already his face is cracking from arrogance and self-conceit.

What is missing, I indicated in the review. Add a couple of characters weakly connected to the hero/more autonomous/opponents and show their life, development, point of view, expand the world. You can additionally add drama, suffering, defeats. For example, sacrifice a couple of characters close to the hero. Or let his efforts go to waste due to unforeseen external forces. You can start hunting the hero, persecuting him. He can end up in prison with aliens, wizards or mad scientists. But it is better to come up with it yourself according to your story (after all, you have some kind of global plan/course). But all this should be really dangerous and difficult for the hero. More risk, more complexity - better achievements, otherwise the achievements look unattractive.

It is written well. The hero is a kind of positive vampire. He drinks without killing, but rather debauching, corrupting. But the dynamics of the story are rather slow, dry and boring. The hero's story lacks challenges, difficulties, surprises, external events, interpersonal relationships (what is are one-sided). There are no competitors, worthy opponents, insurmountable threats either. Of course, it may still appear, but the given pace/motive does not encourage it. The characters that are there are not bad, but they are terribly secondary (they are just a background for the hero). The entire known world is one part of Gotham, abandoned by everyone and were is nothing happens.

Maybe gallons of blood, not galleons?

Somehow the hero approached the creation of a ghoul self-confidently and irresponsibly. The character is unstable, problematic, and the hero has neither experience nor skill. Complications and side effects are expected. But to get good experience, there is not enough sample/several samples. Of course, the hero plays the "good guy", but it also turns out to be a careless guy.

Apparently the author loves pvp 1 on 1 scenes, but he only selects unsuccessful candidates.

The hero is some kind of alternatively gifted. He woke up in a nearly non-functional crypt and seeing that people were being offended, he decided to save them... Which logically brought the orcs upon himself (in his deplorable situation). But did he draw any conclusions - no, after several battles he personally went after their boss. (People, Orcs, Eldars are helped to overcome by faith (Warp), and the hero is helped by the will of the author. What do excellent technologies, the best fighters, tactical capabilities have to do with it? Having miraculously won, since apparently the Warboss was smarter, he concludes that personal combat is great (especially when there is plot armor). Then he pushes a speech about long-term prospects. (And then the hero is biased for no reason, almost loyal). The point is not so much in what he said, but how. Directly reminding Momonga (he talks nonsense, and they blindly agree with him), but there was stupidity justified by general ignorance. Here is the hero's blind faith in himself in half with an appeal to the stupidity of others (which humiliates them, but by humiliating the intelligence of others, the hero himself will not become smarter). By the way, crypteks are not advisers, not managers, not assistants and not military leaders, they are just scientists, masters of technology, keepers of knowledge.

Romance with food? Not everything happens like in "Twilight". Given how small each part is, I doubt there's anything there to intellectually engage even a dumb beast.