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Fire novel so far I can't even lie

This is awkward... I was gonna make her destroy the barrier and do a whole thing, but I had decided against it and decided to make her kill the witches. Majorrrrr typo but hey, I'm writing a Chinese novel now so idc.

The novel is pretty good. Pretty honest review from author, basically the writing quality could use a little bit more practice. Other than that though, the way I do everything else is pretty decent. Not much world background though because this is a FF .-.

Overall amazing novel, love everything. Small cc, try to make numbers a little more realistic matching the actual games. Especially if they're better versions, then theres not really anyway those games woulden't be vastly more popular.

Well in my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, but also by looking at this matter in a different way and without fighting and by trying to make it clear, and by considering each and everyone's opinion, I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say.

World background 2/5

Okay, the MMORPG is a little overdone by now. However, the way the author approached this is something I haven't seen so far. The concept of this novel is great. Now for the criticism, the writing quality is good. Same with the update stability, but when it comes to the story? I kind of hate it, it's an MMORPG in the title. Now with the synopsis combined with the first chapter, I thought players were going to actually be a part of the story. I'm assuming it is, but if it's not the way you opened up the book is pretty much clickbait at this point. I think you should rewrite the synopsis as well as chapter one, and you should also re-write the title to reflect the mc living as an NPC. Now if that's not the main focus of the book, then overall this is terrible, there is way too much filler, the pacing of the book is far too slow, and I don't feel connected to these NPCs you're spending dozens of chapters developing with. Writing quality 4/5 Updates 5/5 Story 3/5 Charecter 4/5

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