NotNecro

The Ice Guy and His Cool Female Colleague

Alright, first off, there is no way in hell that English is not your first language. I mean, the writing quality is just incredible. Anyway, I don't usually read classical works and historical books, but this story has a very interesting storyline, that makes the whole world feel a bit... enigmatic? I really like the choice of words in this book, and even if English is my first language, I'm starting to believe that you are better at it than me! TLDR: This book has a great storyline, so just go ahead and read it.

I can understand why YOU wouldn’t want to go back to see the parents, but keep in mind that in his previous life, he was an orphan for 10 years, so he just wants to give them a chance and see if they really are as bad as he remembers them to be. As I have explained, he can only remember his memories, not feel them. As for getting bullied in the Academy, byy the time he finishes the competition, he would have been able to finish his training with the Lotus Guildmaster. Also, you can assume that he will have boosted his stats by eating another herb just before the competition starts, so he won’t always be the weakest person of the bunch.

This story is written beautifully, with what I could tell good writing quality and a portrayal of realistic characters. The only thing I would say to improve is to change the paragraph size of the chapters and make it a bit shorter as it makes it a bit daunting to read. Otherwise, the chapter length is fine. Other than that, it is a very good story, so keep writing.

I don't normally read stories like this, but I wasn't afraid of giving it a try. This story has very good writing quality and immerses you in the scenes that the writer wants to express. Personally, I think that the start of this book just sprung out from nowhere, and no hate to the author, but the pacing of the story was going at lightspeed. This doesn't make the book any less bad, but you should slow the story down by adding more details of the character's thoughts, adding some slight comedic sentences and maybe including POVs of other characters and their thought process over the scene. Idk, just an idea. Overall, I think you are an underrated writer, and you should keep up the work :)

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Ha, for real, you thought… (hafryt)

First off, I do recommend this book. I really like the way this story has progressed with its World building, and writing vocabulary. It has a really cool concept, and I immediately thought of something like Pokemon. One small issue, that would really help your book, is to use Grammarly or any browser extension that goes over and fixes the little grammar mistakes that you make, and creates a fluid reading experience for the reader. Other than that, I would love to see how this story progresses.