Echoes of Madness: Fragments of Us

Author here!!! writing just to ask for any and feedback as I am new to this, so thank you! also any thoughts will also be helpful. [img=update]

like the book and my name is the heading because my name is David

Very interesting. Chapters are less but is story is very impressive. Keep it up 👍👍

Hi... I am here to give some ideas about this work. As far, grammar is okay, story is okay. I personally don't find anything bad. But I have a suggestion for you. If you can make your paragraphs not so long as first chapter, I guess it will be more good. Keep going author. 👍

I am currently enjoying this book, despite some occasional moments of confusion, which are not particularly problematic. I am particularly fond of the author's writing style and vocabulary choices, which lend a refined quality to the story. Overall, I find the book to be quite engaging and well-written, and although there are some areas that could benefit from further clarification, they do not detract significantly from my enjoyment of the novel. In short, I would recommend this book to anyone looking for a well-crafted and engaging story.

Read first few chapters, really appreciated author hard work. I can see many potential in author. I support you , keep going author.[img=recommend]

The author of this story has a great ability to vividly describe the thoughts and emotions of their characters. From the first few chapters I read this seems like a tragedy. From the very first chapter, the author was able to hook me in and make me very invested in David's story.

The review is based on my first impression about the novel(synopsis, prologue and ch.1). Honestly the kind of m.c. (auto-destructive and possibly crazy) isn't my type but I'll try to be as objective as possible. The writing quality and richness in terminology are definitely high. The update frequency does not seem consistent, but if the author manages to keep this rhythm he's way over the 1 daily upload standard. The story development is quite slow(from the chapters we know only about his violent relationship with his father, addictive substances, start of relationship with Sarah, and possibly the beginning of some mental problem), but I personally still enjoyed the psychological rambling because of the before mentioned writing quality. For the pace I also used the synopsis as comparison and the story seems still quite unclear from what I read. The character design for the m.c. is really good but consequentially that of Sarah and his father are lacking, but this should be solved in the future. Finally the world background doesn't seem that original or specific, but from the end of the first chapter it seems to be thought mainly as the point of view that the m.c. has of it. Don't like this kind of bad ending(feel-bad stories) but I feel those who like the genre will surely find an interesting read in this novel. Keep it up, author👌

I do like the opening of the story - a lot of mystery and intrigue. Like there's a lot of question popping in your mind as in what happened to the MC and around him as you read along.

It's an intriguing approach, one that I've never seen before. The word choice is immaculate, and causes the reader to visualize the scenes, while the plot itself is fascinating. Keep up the good work, author!

This novel will take you on an emotional journey with descriptive, elaborate language. It’s quite dark, and down to the ground exploring the common feeling of grief, pain, self-hatred, and much more. Warning, the lavish description might drown you.

Adding this one in my library, keep up the fight Author. Gonna start reading this. 4/28/23

Honest review for Author: (you can hate me for what i write but i won't butter things up) 1: Your synopsis is 'trash'. Trust me i am trying to be very humble here, synopsis is supposed to be an overall idea of what story focus on, what is our MC is like and how will story devlop so far. It is suppose to give you overall idea of story without spoilers, but in your case!! Just read it yourself, you are smart enough to know. 2: Your Book name doesn't have that buzz word. I know since you are new author you will say a few dialogue about losing your originality or something... but trust me, All that speech of enlightenment won't value anything if your book doesn't get views and collection. 3: Your cover page is not that attractive; Even with the saying 'Dont judge a book by it's cover' 95% of readers still judge it by cover, so you need to put some work on it. 4: Their are novels who get hate for lacking world background, but in your case... you don't have a world background to start with. you are just writing two characters in blank plain and expecting the readers to imagine everything on their own. "That's not how it works". 5: Your way of writing is good but the vocabulary you use isn't. Just so you know, more than half of the readers here have English as their secondary language. So, i will suggest you to use some less fancy and more understandable words. 6; ummm.... i won't write that it's already been 1.6k words, ranting more will just rune my impression here. These are a few basic mistakes i found in your webnovel. I really love your story and way of writing. Hope you keep improving Thankyou for reading up to here.

Honestly I love how darks this story is also It’s nice that you described things a lot. 💯👌 It’s a great read I recommend it

This book is amazing! The authors writing style draws you in with great diction and vivid descriptions. The dark turn of the story totally took me by surprise. Overall, a fantastic read!

Okay [img=recommend] From as far as I've read, the story is kinda dark, but yet again, there is a feeling of excitement in every words, the grammar and the word construction is perfect, from start to end, I love it!. The story background carries a weight of wonder and I must say; perfection. It's an awesome book with a detailed plot, you should try it out. [img=strong][img=strong][img=strong][img=strong]

From the first chapter I got hooked on reading, since it is well written and has almost no errors, I only have one suggestion, there is a chapter that is very long, maybe if you put it in two parts it would be great, otherwise I have no complaints, keep it up this author making a good novel

Wow... I mean, wow, the novel is really a dark peice of art. The grammar is perfect, but any person whose first language is not English is going to have a hard time reading this because of the wording. The only thing I would say to improve is to change the paragraph size of the chapters and make them a bit shorter, as it makes them a bit daunting to read. Otherwise, the chapter length is fine and I loved reading some of the detailed paragraphs. Over all, the novel is really well written; it catches one's attention completely from the first three chapters. Novel like this which have a well written Dark Plot are hard to come by. I would love to read more chapters and know what is going to happen to David in the future. 

I'm enjoying the read so far! Your writing style is outstanding and David resonates with me in many ways throughout the story. I believe a review already suggested shorter paragraphs, but I agree and would like to suggest it as well. Other than that, you got an excellent novel in your hands.

The story is very good and engaging. If you are really picky, there are a few errors but it doesn't take away from the storytelling. Will recommend to others!