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Beo please make that 9th episode/chapter man I'm bored

mmmmm diner yumy wat it kid?

God what happened?

We all cry at Kaori's death. I knew they kill off the love interest but they do it in a way of penetrating your heart before exploding it. I started crying at episode 9 when Kousei was getting beat by his mom and him saying "I wish you would die" Saying something like that is the worst thing. Sad. At least we can see Kaori again in this Fan-Fic.

To be honest, this might seem cold but we shouldn't have Tsubaki as a love interest. I think kinda staying to the original plot seems better

Sad. Still pretty good for a start. A good thing maybe is to, add a lot more words. I noticed that this was a lot shorter than your older version of this Fan fic so yeah. This is just a suggestion. (can i put ma balls in yo jaws)

Mk. We are on the 7th chapter so, imma leave my first impression so far. Writing quality. It's improved a lot more and the story doesn't just go flat; Stability of updates: It's good so far, 7 chapters in I think about 1 week. Another thing, the chapters are pretty good length I'd say, maybe try to have a goal of 3K if not already. Suggestions: Do not make this a Harem for the love of God, Add some more references yeah, GJ (can i put my balls in yo jaws)

The new version of your story is really good so far. The things I probably dont wanna see that was from the 1st version was the lottery thing and please for the love of god dont make this a harem.

I'm getting deja vu from dis

thanks for reading