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Ooo Thanks for going over my review To be honest this was meant more info for new readers than it is feedback for the author, mostly because It's difficult to write proper feedback and still keep it short enough not to lose reader attention. Not to mention the possible spoilers... If I was writing more for the purpose of feedback, I'd say something more like this: * Don't repeat "as a former assassin, ..." so many times - that's what I mean when I said repetition. I can only take being reminded that she was an assassin 3 times a chapter for so long... * Pacing isn't just about slow progression, it's also about structure. We finish a 70 or so chapters 'training arc', and instead of being rewarded for going on an adventure now, we instead get transitioned to a new training arc... * Try and leave a little more mystery in the plot. Her parents origin's mystery is so shallow and gets resolved so fast... and even hearing of the 'mysterious' sixth realm, a few chapters later turns out a bunch of people know it like their backyard... Sorry that there are some small spoilers here. I'll delete this anfter (and if) you happened to read this
A well written transmigration story with a large emphasis on family and bonds. You can feel the authors love for her work from how deeply she explores her protagonists feeling and motivations. The offside is that the story ends up very slow moving and the protagonists internal conflicts a little repetitive. Also, protagonist cheats are kind of excessive... Anyways, if you want to read this, you'll need the patience to see MC slowly growing up in this new world.
Well, this is rather confusing. I thought she was physically entering, not just with her consiousness. How would she even train her body in there when its still outside?
Sure, if you hadn't made them panic that is
Relying on him actually finding his way to the gate is kind of a big gamble
Girl, your friend just had her hair and eye color change, no comments?
It is rather unusual for those at the highest cultivation of a country to serve as border guards. For such high and mighty elders to reduce themselves to mere sentries...
Didn't she sleep with him while he was her subordinate?
There's that concubine of a duke MC saved. The duke is trying to break through to the ascended saint no? Excelent time to kill one before he stabilizes his cultivation!
wait, is wen migna... trying to get san yongly dead to take her book?