CalypsoDay

I believe in you!

It's a pretty good story. The plot is interesting and I am quite enjoying the story development. It gets better and better with every chapter. You need to work a bit more on your grammar and sentence structure, but then again, it does improve with every chapter, so the fact that you are learning and get better, must be appreciated. Keep it up! The story really has the potential to be amazing!

To be honest, the story is a little weird, but in a fun and interesting way. I'm in love with the protagonist, though. She's extremely funny, and her cute personality makes you want to stay for more than one chapter. The narration is quite good, maybe I would love a bit more description to help me get more involved in the story, but that's not really an issue. Keep it up!

Great story. I really like the plot, and I'm also enjoying the dialogue, though I am not a great fan of that. You just manage to make it interesting. The only thing that bothers me is that certain sentences suddenly stop. I think you should develop them a bit more to keep the reader immersed in the story. The sudden interruption of the description tends to wake you up a little to reality. Anyway, good job!

Thank you! I appreciate your opinion! I use the present tense is used to emphasize certain monologues or ideas. I may be wrong, but that's how I liked it. "I also think it would be more dramatic if the angels being killed are familiar to the main lead. Readers want to feel with her not just walk with her." - Her love is for her people, not just for the ones she knows. That's why I didn't go overly dramatic.

My story moves at a slower pace, even though it may seem fast at times. That's why I didn't hurry with the introduction of the other species. There will be plenty of humans & other creatures later on. :)

Thank you so much!

Oh! Yes! Yes! Yes! Now, this is a fun read. I really love the princess, we definitely deserve more strong female characters! I'm all for that! Though I'm not a huge fan of romance stories, I do have a soft spot for forbidden love, so I'm quite enjoying this. The fact that it has vampires in it is even a bigger plus. There were a few grammar mistakes, but the rest of the narrative makes up for it. Great job!

Fairies and assassins. To be honest, I didn't expect to read something like that, but somehow you managed to build an interesting story around your idea and it turned out to be a pleasant read. I noticed some grammatical errors, but nothing worth mentioning. Overall, it is a strong story! Good job!

Fantastic world-building! I like how detailed the story is, especially because there is a perfect balance between description and dialogue, and that helps me immerse myself more in the story ( I admit, this is the most important thing for me). The main character is interesting enough to keep you reading, and his arrogance is almost funny sometimes. I mean, I know I laughed a few times. Overall, this is a great fantasy story! Good job!