Chapter 4 Notes

Hey guys here's the chapter you've been waiting for! I know it's late, but I have been busy over the last few months. Second job, other novels and just plain procrastination have slowed me down in writing the chapter. Though I do still have lots of Ideas for the Novel. It has been a long time, longer than I expected to get this chapter out. Though I did think it was going to be 10k words, and is instead 18K so yeah.

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So where to begin these end notes, I want to thank everyone for the reviews, just know that if you are a guest and ask when the next chapter is coming out I won't be replying, too much hassle to tell ya.

There was also another comment asking me if I was going to up the rating on the novel. I don't really see the need to as I haven't gone into M territory… I don't think. As I have been completely skipping the sex scenes and am mainly just implying that it happens I'm pretty sure I don't have to put it up. Though I could be wrong.

Going back to people asking me when the next chapter will come out, over on Webnovel.com where I also post this novel I have put up a chapter with a progression bar on it, so you guys can all look there to see how the chapters going. Same name as here just on different site.

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So what did you guys think of the establishment of the Immortal Empire? Honestly I really wanted to use Eternal Empire as it just has such a good ring to it, but that's already been taken so I went with immortal.

I was having a slight bit of trouble trying to think of the best way to get the scene done, I couldn't half ass it as it was the establishment of the empire Mace will now be ruling with the rest. And though I think I didn't do badly with the whole scene in general, I know that building the empire up will be the hardest part. Expanding it and its galaxy spanning activities.

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I will not be answering who the Jedi is at the start of the Chapter as I want you guys to keep guessing until I actually reveal who it is. But I will now mention that Mace and his companions will all have someone or multiple someone's they will be interacting with throughout the novel.

They will all get a certain person they will interact with and in many cases take in as Apprentices of the sort. This brings me to the next big thing I have to talk to you guys about.

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Now I don't like asking too many opinions from readers about story plot, and don't usually change what I'm going to do because of what you say. Maybe incorporate stuff, change some stuff around, but not fundamentally change the novel.

Well I'm stuck on a plot point which could make or break the story in my opinion and I do need outside opinions for it. Now as said most of everyone in the main cast will get a type of apprentice they will interact with. In Mace's case he will be getting 3, *Spoiler*, Now I won't tell you who the other two are, they've been locked in and I can't wait to write those arcs, it's the third that is giving me some trouble.

So Spoiler warning that might not be a spoiler. For his 3rd apprentice I was thinking of doing something with the force or changing the timeline just a little so that Rey, Yes the one you are thinking about, would become his apprentice and I mean from a young age, like 2 or 3 becoming his first 'new' apprentice. Meaning that to keep with continuity I would have to introduce her to the story in about 2, maybe 3 chapters before I start doing bigger time skips. For your information she would be one year younger than Ahsoka in the story going forwards.

Now I have agonised in my head if this would be too unbelievable and sort of break what I have done so far. I mean Mace and the others being taken to the future ok, but Rey is tricky because of her connection to Palpatine. Also I wouldn't be planning on bringing any other main movie characters such as Luke or Han into the novel either.

So I am asking you, should I have Rey as his apprentice, (First apprentice to appear), Or scrap that story line and instead move forwards with him just having the 2 apprentices already locked in. Really love to hear your guys' thoughts about the matter.

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Next up, some of you may be wondering about some of the positions I have given out, if they are not explained specifically in the chapter, I will be explaining them later. For example I may not have said it, but the reason I have chosen Ashara to be the Emperors Voice, instead of a different position is because it coincides with the fact that with the Jedi not knowing About Mace being the master/aka no solid proof. They still think Ashara is the big bad, being a Darth and all. Though there will be speculation as I do remember Mace telling Aayla that she was his apprentice.

Though what this means is that yes Ashara will be the main one that deals with the republic out in the open. As said I will expand on this more in later chapters, as well as everyone else's positions.

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Now onto characters!

Well, really I only wanted to talk about Jaesa and Vaylin this time in the notes. I quite enjoyed writing Jaesa this chapter, just her own brand on insanity and thought pattern interest me. Some of you might think I may have gone too far with the Twi'lek guards, some might think I didn't go far enough.

Main point is I quite like writing her character just because it gives me the chance to see just how sadistic I can go with her thought patterns and a darker side of the sith, before I think it's too far.

Now on to Vaylin, It is interesting to write her as trying to figure out her thought pattern, being used most of her life by Valkorion and others in her life, creates quite the character to work with. Though as I always say I'm not the best at writing characters. As mentioned in the chapter it is my personal thoughts that she would have become a Jedi should she have grown up in the wider galaxy.

Her inquisitive personality and connection to the force leads to so many different avenues to chase when it comes to what could have been. I'm slightly sad that I haven't seen more novels with her in it. Though then SWTOR novels are novels I don't see or read as much, and most delve into the beginning content and not later story plots with the outlander and Eternal Empire.

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Finally I will talk a bit about the next chapter. I think I'll make the next chapter an interlude chapter, mainly the main characters having a meeting about what will happen in the future, with the new empire, allies, technology (That's a big if about technology, I not the best with Star Wars tech.) and dropping hints about what they will be doing in later chapters. This will be used to set up lots of the chapters to follow. I don't think this is a spoiler and no I don't know when I'll get it out.

As I have mentioned over the last few posts, I work in the medical industry/warehouse supply for hospitals and with what has been happening recently I have no time to write. I almost didn't get this chapter out today as I crushed one of my toes at work Friday after a long week of overtime. Spent a good 2 hours in the hospital Saturday getting it looked at, barely had motivation to write after that.

Thankfully nothing is broken or fractured, but work is still busy and I can only write on weekends atm. Though I did just find out my state, Victoria, is being put into lockdown so good or bad thing?

Anyways thanks for reading I'll answer any comments that may come if I can!

Zerven out!

PS. Almost forgot, replaced original Chapter 4.1 because I think I tweaked it a bit, so yeah any comments on that chapter are now gone. Just thought I would let you guys know.