Naruto: Itachi's Cousin

love the concepts behind this and look forward to reading further, also love that there is romance in the book without herem. herem often spoils stories so like that there isn't that tag here :)

The story is decent and I think it deserves a read before judging it but I feel like there is just something off about this story. mostly the MC. his reaction to everything is so off. You can't really relate to him at all. He gets scared, nervous, brave, then reckless in moments, all almost at the same time. no real intelligence behind it. not the way anyone considered a genius with a memory like his would react. Especially considering he could only do 5 push ups. that was enough for him to face three apprentices of Master Peng. Not to mentioned he literally gets the saitama treatment by a younger master peng who was in high school. one punch death. so far he hasn't show an ounce of potential or being reasonable. he loses his first two fights because he acted the way no rational person would act. most children aren't that stupid. I just think the author tried to throw in all these emotions just to show he's young and inexperienced but its done so sloppy that it just seems off, like he might be a bit mentally unstable, not an emotional child. No one wants to read about a mentally handicap child, nothing personal. other than that I like the setting of the story and ill keep reading and if it improves ill revise my review.

I've been following your stuff for a little while and I think this is your best work. The character interactions are the best part of this story. It doesn't feel rushed and I looking forward to what else this story has in store.

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This story seems to have a unique mc and brings about unique dynamics with other characters which is very interesting to read he is calculating while also being very emotional I kinda want him to break all Konoha records as he progresses through the story.

Te doy 5 estrellas por qué la historia tiene salvación pero exijo que cambies la actitud estúpida he infantil y despreocupada del MC el no es Naruto hasta Kakashi que es despreocupado solo sobrevivió por guión por qué Zabuza,itachi,pain y Madara tuvieron la oportunidad de borrarlo del mapa hasta Kakuzu ni los fuertes se confían como para que lo haga el MC no tiene sentido sea serio y cree un transfondo bueno con una personalidad sería y enfocada no es difícil