DetachedDreamer

MC sounds like a boring loser 😴

Good Luck!

Honestly, this story is pretty great all around. except for one thing. Camie. Hands down the worst character ever written. I cringe reading her dialogue. I hope she dies or just disappears because she ruins every chapter she's in.

This OC sucks

that pricing is messed up lol

another terrible name lol just yelling random noises out at this point

lol terrible name

Great story so far but the reveal is dragging on. More interesting to see how their dynamic evolves as son and father instead of whats going on now. his other relationships are developing well tho. overall a good story.

I know its hard being original and I can look past an origin of a dog man in the Soma familia but to decide to stay, that's too much. Trash God, trash familia. Made dumb excuses not to join other familias. Its too easy. lol that was an excuse. The grammar is cool but quality of the actual story was sacrificed for this attempt at being original. lol the Soma family. His power is OP but he's pretty one dimensional as a person so far. Maybe that'll change. Maybe this is some crazy AU where you aren't pure trash for being in the Soma clan but thats a lot of forced nonsense you'd have to add and the reader would have to swallow to believe. and He just seems like an OP side quester at the moment.

ya coming from the dude who was a loyal dog. maybe he should just keep his mouth shut.