Author here!!! writing just to ask for any and feedback as I am new to this, so thank you! also any thoughts will also be helpful. [img=update]

like the book and my name is the heading because my name is David

Very interesting. Chapters are less but is story is very impressive. Keep it up 👍👍

Hi... I am here to give some ideas about this work. As far, grammar is okay, story is okay. I personally don't find anything bad. But I have a suggestion for you. If you can make your paragraphs not so long as first chapter, I guess it will be more good. Keep going author. 👍

I am currently enjoying this book, despite some occasional moments of confusion, which are not particularly problematic. I am particularly fond of the author's writing style and vocabulary choices, which lend a refined quality to the story. Overall, I find the book to be quite engaging and well-written, and although there are some areas that could benefit from further clarification, they do not detract significantly from my enjoyment of the novel. In short, I would recommend this book to anyone looking for a well-crafted and engaging story.

The author of this story has a great ability to vividly describe the thoughts and emotions of their characters. From the first few chapters I read this seems like a tragedy. From the very first chapter, the author was able to hook me in and make me very invested in David's story.

The review is based on my first impression about the novel(synopsis, prologue and ch.1). Honestly the kind of m.c. (auto-destructive and possibly crazy) isn't my type but I'll try to be as objective as possible. The writing quality and richness in terminology are definitely high. The update frequency does not seem consistent, but if the author manages to keep this rhythm he's way over the 1 daily upload standard. The story development is quite slow(from the chapters we know only about his violent relationship with his father, addictive substances, start of relationship with Sarah, and possibly the beginning of some mental problem), but I personally still enjoyed the psychological rambling because of the before mentioned writing quality. For the pace I also used the synopsis as comparison and the story seems still quite unclear from what I read. The character design for the m.c. is really good but consequentially that of Sarah and his father are lacking, but this should be solved in the future. Finally the world background doesn't seem that original or specific, but from the end of the first chapter it seems to be thought mainly as the point of view that the m.c. has of it. Don't like this kind of bad ending(feel-bad stories) but I feel those who like the genre will surely find an interesting read in this novel. Keep it up, author👌

I do like the opening of the story - a lot of mystery and intrigue. Like there's a lot of question popping in your mind as in what happened to the MC and around him as you read along.

It's an intriguing approach, one that I've never seen before. The word choice is immaculate, and causes the reader to visualize the scenes, while the plot itself is fascinating. Keep up the good work, author!