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author really needs to work on making the narrative more compelling by doing more of showing and less info dumping! though the grammar is impeccable and conversations between characters are well fleshed out, I feel the story could benefit from more character depth, especially from the MC. Ortega seems a bit too basic to me ... overall it's not bad. highly recommend for urban lovers out there

From Office Boy To Alpha Male

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Thanks for your honesty and maturity . I like reviews like yours helps remind me I'm not perfect and still have stuff to work on . I'll try to make the story more compelling, thanks for reading my work