Review Detail of WriterTheos in BonEs, FlamEs and IcE (DROPPED VERSION)

Writing a review after the first chapter. To me, the first half of it was nothing but a big info dump. A history lesson. In the first chapter you need to focus on the most important stuff: The main character. their foundation, their will, their ambition, their drive, what they want, why they want it, who they are. That's what matters since that is why the readers are most likely reading your story. Instead we got a ton of history I fo about the warring nations, when none of that was really nessecary. if we started at the end with those soldiers and the mage, then everything could slowly be revealed throughout the story, not just dumped onto you at the start. still, the ending was good so I liked it overall.