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Kalki_gsk
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Really well written story and a unique world building. Its like a futuristic cyberpunk but with mysterious powers in the blend. That said, the scenes of carnage are just described using a few words. It can be expanded upon to make people feel the impact. And the paragraphing should be done properly..shorter paragraphs would be easier to read and floow. Keep up the great work

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I'll definitely be more wary of my paragraphs in the future. Thanks.