The story was so good that I got goosebumps. A nice reading experience for me and the other readers. Sometimes, I am confused about who was talking but it was still enjoyable to read! Nice world exposition and not info-dumping. And also vivid in narrations! Good luck and praying for your success!

the world building is pretty detailed thus it makes you really dive into the author's creative mind. i can only suggest that maybe the paragraphs could use some breaking apart since webnovel users mostly use the app to read and it gets confusing to read long paragraphs. all in all a pretty amazing book with well written characters and plot. kudos to the author!

I think my two major points that I absolutely loved about this book were the plot, and the characters. The plot itself is very unique, and the writer has a masterful talent of slowly trickling in information to build up the world and the settings in a way that remains captivating throughout. I loved the dyanmics between Ari and Joe, and it was enjoyable to see how much thought and detail was put into their backstories and personalities. I think Ari has to be one of my favourite characters I've ever read. Equally, side character interaction- yes! The alternate points of focus made this really, really interesting. My one criticism would probably be sentence structure. For while the author writes rather poetically, the sentences can get rather confused and disrupts the reading experience a bit. But overall, great work

Nice work author! I had fun reading it... you're especially good and making the reader visualize the story by describing many details throughout the story! There are some minor grammatical mistakes but those are not enough to bother me, and since you're not a native English speakers (like me) it's very understandable and I'm sure you will improve on that in the future! The only tip I would give is that I would name the chapters a little more inviting to read, the chapter names can be a little boring to some! Anyway keep up the good work! I will keep following your progress! Cheers!

The author does a nice job of setting up their world by showing rather than telling. It is a fun world of magic and mayhem, and yet it doesn't feel overly-cliche. There is a slight steampunk vibe as well, which adds to the enjoyment. Overall, this is a good start.

The synopsis is interesting. I loved how the story started at the beginning of the chapter. I would suggest to the author that it would be great if you could fix the paragraphs into three or four lines. So, the audience could read the chapter easily. Very promising characters. Looking forward to reading more chapters. All the best and well done, Author!

The plot and characters are amazing. I enjoyed reading the book. My suggestion is to smash the length of the paragraphs a little bit, because there were places where I got tired while reading. Keep writing!