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"That one day... One day I'll be able to write this story, because there's so much content in my mind, I just need to write it down somewhere." - Azlabztory, The Omniscient God, Storyteller
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(Chap 1-17) Well, I'll separate the review into 5 points: * The writing quality is very bad, a lot of inconsistency, and this bothers the reader a lot. But I decided to disregard this part a little, since English is not his main language. * It updates almost every day, if not every day. So this part is fine, the problem is that the rush to post chapters can cause problems in writing the chapters. * The development of the story I don't know much what to say. It sometimes seems to be being developed and other times not. * Character designs don't have much to say. * And the backgroud is the Central World backgroud from the past, the problem would be that we don't know much about that era, so I'll say it's fine, since this is a fan fiction and the freedom is with the author. That's it, I hope I can help the author of the story to improve it. Good reading to those planning to read it, and good writing to the author.
I don't think he should be able to learn Physics Magic, after all, it was Rimuru who created that magic, and if this story is set in the past, Rimuru wouldn't have reincarnated yet. But if he himself created this magic, then I guess it should be okay, just please explain how he created it.
Yeah the translator got it wrong, sorry
In addition to the fact that he wants Rimuru to think he is being submissive, it is also due to the fact that he is still a child, after all he has spent most of his life in a hospital and has not had many opportunities to mature. So you can consider this as a trait of his personality that can be removed as we progress in the story, after all he will have to mature, right?