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I've already wrote something. btw this is constructive criticism. Ik radiant, he is a mutual friend of mine from a sever. don't dickride somebody you don't know ok? have a good day sir.
Man.. I wanted more. This fic is actually superb, thanks for refreshing read it's actually made me enjoy something on this site after such a long time. The writing, the delivery, the setting... I love it. its not slow paced nor is it too fast but I can see what your doing as a fellow author. Thanks for the read
I agree.
Would have been better if you explained this before and not just wrote he learned this in his childhood in a previous chap
Once you start writing new chaps remember to put a comma before quotation if you are writing he said or he exclaimed etc .
yep
On the first chap your MC said I wish for immortality and use any means possible, then downplay that kind of quote. He doesn't feel like a scientist reborn but a typical kidm
.... I'm getting frustrated with this MC.... and I don't know why. He acts like a typical Mc archetype ik, I was expecting a scientist backgroundish type character
"I guess we should get going," he replied. A comma comes before quotation mark and period comes after.
MC has a lot of consistencies with his personality I cant wrap my finger around it.
From the beginning, he was inversed in conflict. As a top researcher in a bunker, who was hidden from other nations, he should have a cautious mentality ingrained. All that means he was in a cutthroat environment so why has he not got the cutthroat mwantality. Dog eat dog world. dog eat dog magical world. It doesn't make a difference. Mc is already well versed in conflict so he should know.