Mordou24

the dialogues felt a bit , restricted . usually people say more than Aaah , fuck . try adding more

The idea is good , the story seems nice and promising but I can't really say that the end result is THAT good . I mean , I know that the MC is 16 years old mentally but still . He summons troops all the time , with weak excuses , there is no mention of how they look after themselves , as having a 100 (and still growing) party of knights would need a lot of supplies . And it feels like the some characters have different personalities to fit the MC

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I don't think Charles will remember Harry anyway , unless other people speak of his "brother that vanished"

Feels like the Mc just became Ashley's bitch for no reason. They are the same yes, they can become friends , yes , but why the fk is he just following all her orders? It is annoying af .

He cant see her cause he doesnt have the 6 eyes activated , they are not constant like satoru , they have time limit . there is no passive effect , only active

Couldn't she just make potions that enhance her strength, dex etc? Like , drink this potion for +5 str

Really like the story so far , I haven't read the old one so I am unfamiliar with the plot . Mc so far seems pretty interesting , and the chapters are bigger compared to normal ffs.

I feel like the Dwarfs dexterity is not high enough ? He is a blacksmith ,yeah , he needs strength to hammer away at the ores , but he needs the same dexterity to not make mistakes during the forging process. Good work nonetheless

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