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Just a suggestion... tone it down on the stunned reaction for every move he makes and save them for when he actually makes an outrageous save or spike.
you know there's always bound to be some negative comments in every story when they aren't to some people's likings but I can say with absolute certainty that for this story... they are all justified. it's not even a story... it feels like a report or something like, this happened and that happened and I will do this, things like that. the interactions are cringe, the romance is forced and the ideas are just downright ridiculous. If this author were to write the fight between Sukuna and Gojo, it would have probably taken him one chapter to finish.
So far so good... there're a few flaws like not mentioning his position other than that he is a spiker and since Asahi is playing I can only assume he is taking Tanaka's position but not sure... and I think if you could spend some time on technicalities, thatd'd be great. and I hope in the future when he's back to his normal strength, the matches don't end like 25-5 because that's really impossible. no matter how good you are as an individual there are many limitations to what you can achieve alone. I hope to see him in full strength against Ushijima.
Argentina is one of the best national teams around in volleyball. It's not easy getting into. He did that because of his pride and resolution to defeat his rivals not because he wasn't good enough to get into Japan's national team.
this is just a monologue... will there be like conversations where he interacts with other people?
since Naruto still sucks at sensing and controlling his chakra it's fine but be careful about the others.
i thought mages can tell the difference between a human and a demon
why are their conversations so awkward?
is it Harem?
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